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'''Alterations''' [[page type is::definition|are]] [[GM]] mediated custom changes to a facet of your character, usually an item. In most cases, these alterations are purely cosmetic, but sometimes additional factors can be added.
'''Alterations''' [[page type is::definition|are]] [[GM]] mediated custom changes to a facet of your character, usually an item. In most cases, these alterations are purely cosmetic, but sometimes additional factors can be added.


In addition, there is also a specific type called [[LTB Alterations]] or [[Premium]] alterations and [[Feature Alteration|Feature alteration]] that have their own special rules.
In addition, there is also a specific type called [[LTB Alterations]] or [[Premium]] alterations and [[Feature alteration]] that have their own special rules.


==Process==
==Process==
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===Merchant Sessions===
===Merchant Sessions===
Most common at festivals, alterers will show up either randomly or at prescheduled times. They will open a list, that when {{com|join}}ed will place your name on said list. The list usually remains open for some time, to allow everyone to join, an occasionally it will remain open during the entire event. But usually, it will be closed after a decent amount of time, preventing any other joiners.
Most common at festivals, alterers will show up either randomly or at prescheduled times. They will open a list, that when {{com|join}}ed will place your name on said list. The list usually remains open for some time, to allow everyone to join, an occasionally it will remain open during the entire event. But usually, it will be closed after a decent amount of time, preventing any other joiners. At any point if you reconsider your decision to join the list, you may type {{com|leave}} {{tt|list}} to leave the alteration list. If the list has been closed, you will not be able to re{{tt|join}} it.


At this point, the alterer will usually either pick the first name (very uncommon) or a random name from the list (usual) to do work with. It should be noted, '''''getting on the list does not guarantee work''''' unless the alterer specifically states it. Some alterers will only work for five or ten people, others do multi-hour events working for fifty or more.
At this point, the alterer will usually either pick the first name (very uncommon) or a random name from the list (usual) to do work with. It should be noted, '''''getting on the list does not guarantee work''''' unless the alterer specifically states it. Some alterers will only work for five or ten people, others do multi-hour events working for fifty or more.


Like all alterations, all rare materials must be on hand and as well as payment required by the alterer.
Like all alterations, all rare materials must be on hand and as well as payment required by the alterer. If your rare material 'fodder' is in many small pieces; compare the total volumes and make an educated guess on what your alteration will require. Put the like-type alteration materials in a simple pouch you won't want back. Keep any other materials separate to make the alterer's life easier.


====Assistants====
====Assistants====
It has become more common in recent years for alterers to employ player assistants to do the initial examination of someone's idea, as these people tend to be experienced in the process. They'll help people with incomplete ideas enhance them, pick out any typos or rules violations, and just generally clean up the idea. While it is not required that the assistant's ideas be listened to, it is highly likely the alterer will not look favorably upon complete disregard of their rule corrections.
It has become more common in recent years for alterers to employ player assistants to do the initial examination of someone's idea, as these people tend to be experienced in the process. They'll help people with incomplete ideas enhance them, pick out any typos or rules violations, and just generally clean up the idea. While it is not required that the assistant's ideas be listened to, it is highly likely the alterer will not look favorably upon complete disregard of their rule corrections.


====Role-playing Considerations====
===Scroll===

Scroll alterations are often done either through the [[LTB]] system or as a reward for purchasing an event. These differ in that all contact with the alterer is done via an ingame item, the scroll, and depending on the complexity or requests, may take several days.
Role-playing considerations are always in play. This is the case with any live merchant anywhere, regardless of if it happens during a [[:Category:Paid_events|paid event]] or not. '''Live merchants are role-playing events.'''<ref>[[Post:Social Outrage - 12/03/2017 - 13:03]]</ref>

For example, if you're playing a [[Perverse]]-aligned character, it might not go well when you show up to a religious [[Rakash]] merchant.

===Alteration Scrolls===
Scroll alterations are often done either through the [[LTB]] system or as a reward for purchasing an event. These differ in that all contact with the alterer is done via an in-game item, the scroll, and depending on the complexity or requests, may take several days.

Not all alteration scrolls are equal. Depending on the scroll's source, the types of items you can have worked performed on will vary. More complex items require that the merchant processing your request have more clearances — not all GameMasters can work on all items. '''Some items cannot be altered via scroll, period.'''

====Using Scrolls====
*Hold the object you want altered in your left hand before you write to this scroll.
*To get rid of your alterer's scroll, you must DROP it. It will blow away after a little while. Once you drop a scroll, all information about your request will be erased, and you will need to get a new one from the merchant.
*Once you have written to the scroll, you are free to put both items away, and go on about your business. You'll be notified when the merchant responds in any way. However, you will need to have the scroll in your possession in order to respond to any messages or suggestions the merchant makes.
Merchants have the final word. Read any posted information about what types of things the merchant alters and what rules the merchant uses.

=====Commands=====
*WRITE CHANGE: Allows you to change the item you want to be altered. You must be holding the new item in your left hand when you used this option.
*WRITE NEW {text}: Overwrites any existing request, but if the scroll is already associated with an item, it will not change that association (use CHANGE, in that case). You can use this to start over at any time prior to ACCEPTing the alteration and price.
*WRITE REPLY {text}: Allows you to respond to a merchant's message.
*WRITE ACCEPT: (Signs the alteration contract and authorizes the merchant to charge you and create the alteration.)
*WRITE OFFER {amount} [province]: When a merchant gives you a price for the alteration, you can bargain a different price using this command. The optional province can be: ZOLUREN, THERENGIA, ILITHI or QI'RESHALIA
*You ACCEPT after the merchant has approved either an alteration, or a counteroffer on the price for the alteration.

====Scroll Types====
=====[[LTB_alterations|LTB Scrolls]]=====
Generally speaking, this type of alteration will consist of a holdable/wearable, non-magical item that isn't heavily scripted. [[Cambrinth]] items are also acceptable. These are always cosmetic changes only.

=====Event-Tier Scrolls=====
Scrolls obtained through events can (again, ''generally speaking'') be used on more complex items than Long-Term Benefit (premium) scrolls. As with LTB scrolls, any changes would be strictly cosmetic (only be to the tap/look/read, not to the functionality or messaging).

Examples of items you ''might'' be able to alter with Event scrolls but not with LTB scrolls: magical foci, and weapons/armor with flare enchantments.<ref>[[Post:Corn Maze Scroll Alteration Guidelines - 12/24/2020 - 04:56]]</ref>

A comprehensive list of guidelines for [[:Category:Sleeping Dragon Corn Maze|Corn Maze]] scrolls can be [[Post:Corn Maze Scroll Alteration Guidelines - 12/24/2020 - 04:56|found here]].

===Errors & Buyer's Remorse===
'''Alterations are final.''' Once a design is agreed upon that's it. Please ensure that you're happy with the final results before leaving the session. Try not to feel rushed, or that you're holding up the line. Everyone involved in the process wants you to walk away with a product you'll be happy with. Sometimes that can take a while.
* If you're attending a merchant session and cannot agree upon a design the "slot" can be refunded. You're not committed and can walk away. Just ask.
* Items can be re-altered. Where and how you do that depends on what the item is. If it's something that can only be done by a merchant you'll have to resubmit it to a merchant.
* If you have a typo (it happens) you can {{com|ASSIST}} about it.
* If you just want to change something, though, it's treated as a new alteration. Another slot, another scroll, etc.

==String Limits==
{| class="wikitable"
! Type || Command To See || Length/Guidelines
|-
| Item SHORT || (base item) || 15/15/15, "article,adjective,noun"
|-
| Item TAP || <tt>INV&nbsp;HELD</tt> || Cannot exceed 80 characters. No commas.<br/>(including the leading article a/an/some and spaces)
|-
| Item LOOK || <tt>LOOK&nbsp;[ITEM]</tt> || Try to stay under 500 characters. 511 characters is the hard limit. (512+ gets truncated.)
|-
| Item READ || <tt>READ&nbsp;[ITEM]</tt> || 50 characters and 10 words
|-
| Face changing mask || || 250 characters when worn
|-
| [[:Category:Post_room_string|Post room strings]] || || 80 characters and 10 words. No commas.
|-
| [[:Category:Atmospheric_items|Atmospheric Messages]] || || Ideally the length of a TAP (around 80). Some wiggle room. Keep it as short as possible.
|-
| Titles || || 20 characters and 2 words. (Adding connecting words is ok within reason.)
|-
| Custom Maker's Marks || || 150 characters. Automatically prefixed with with "the image of" and appended "with impressed into the material's surface" (not counted in character count limit).
|-
| Custom {{com|depart}} messages || || No longer than 500 characters, including spacing and punctuation.
|-
| Custom login/logout messages || || Maximum 150 characters for what you see when you log in or out.<br>Maximum 90 characters for what shows up in the Arrivals window.
|-
| Signet ring impressions || <tt>LOOK&nbsp;[ITEM]</tt> || This field should not exceed 80 characters. If you are designing a monogram, it should not contain more than two or three initials.
|}
'''Note:''' There must be two spaces between all sentences.

This tool can be helpful in keeping your alteration idea within character count limits: http://drservice.info/static/alterationbuddy.htm


==Items==
==Items==


===General Rules===
===General Rules===
* The merchant has the final say.

* Merchants generally do not add special mechanics or scripts to items.
* Description from Limited Treasure items should be used with caution.
* Merchants generally do not change where an item is worn or how much it can hold.
* The short description is ''purely mechanical'', and is how you interact with the item. It is setup 15/15/15, "article,adjective,noun".<ref>For some insight on how this works mechanically, particularly with adjectives, see [[Post:Adjectives With Two Words - 07/08/2020 - 08:51|this post]].</ref>
:* Players do not have to define this, as it's usually obvious and straightforward. If you have specific preferences, however, please state them to the merchant or their assistant.
* The tap (the name of the item that you see when you type INV HELD) cannot exceed 80 characters (including the leading article a/an/some and spaces)
* The tap (the name of the item that you see when you type INV HELD) cannot exceed 80 characters (including the leading article a/an/some and spaces)
* The tap cannot contain commas. (Commas serve as separators in inventory lists.)
* The look (what you see when you type LOOK [ITEM]) cannot exceed 500 characters, including spaces and punctuation. (There must be two spaces between sentences.)
* The look (what you see when you type LOOK [ITEM]) cannot exceed 512 characters, including spaces and punctuation. (There must be two spaces between sentences.)
* A read (what you see when you type READ [ITEM]) should be no more than 50 characters and 10 words. (Most writing should be in a separate read and not in the tap or look.)
* A read (what you see when you type READ [ITEM]) should be no more than 50 characters and 10 words. (Most writing should be in a separate read and not in the tap or look.)
:* Words or phrases in any racial language will have to be verified and may not be possible at all times.
:* Words or phrases in any racial language will have to be verified and may not be possible at all times.
:* Character names are generally not allowed.
:* Character names are generally not allowed.
:* Phrases and writing should ideally be in the READ and not the LOOK. Be aware that the system automatically appends the phrase "There appears to be something written on it." when the READ is populated, so having written text in both locations (or referring to the READ text in the LOOK) can occasionally produce awkward results.
* If containers are being used as a source for material (and not the item altered), they must be empty.
* Items named after a race are usually not permitted. For instance a Kaldaran shield needs to be specifically described in such a way that it can only be Kaldaran.

===Out of Bounds===
* Items cannot dictate how people feel or react. (For example, your armor can't strike fear into the hearts of your enemies.)
* Items cannot dictate how people feel or react. (For example, your armor can't strike fear into the hearts of your enemies.)
* Glyphs, runes, and sigils are not permitted. Other synonyms, such as "symbols," are usually permitted.
* Items cannot glow or otherwise emit their own light (unless one of its materials naturally glows). Shimmering and other similar words are acceptable.
* Merchants generally do not add special mechanics or scripts to items.
* Merchants generally do not change where an item is worn or how much it can hold.
* Items cannot imply that they have mechanics they do not have. For example, stalking leathers can be "designed to aid stealth," but they do not actually and cannot be said to aid the wearer in moving about.
* Items cannot imply that they have mechanics they do not have. For example, stalking leathers can be "designed to aid stealth," but they do not actually and cannot be said to aid the wearer in moving about.
* Items named after a race are usually not permitted. For instance a Kaldaran shield needs to be specifically described in such a way that it can only be Kaldaran.
* Some descriptions should specify "when worn" or similar phrasing to prevent confusion or strangeness when an item is not being worn.
* If containers are being used as a source for material (and not the item altered), they must be empty.
* Obvious [[Out of Character|out-of-genre or out-of-character]] references/designs are not permitted.
* Obvious [[Out of Character|out-of-genre or out-of-character]] references/designs are not permitted.
* Nothing obscene, vulgar, or sexually explicit is permitted.
* Nothing obscene, vulgar, or sexually explicit is permitted.
:* Items in DragonRealms should generally not be more than PG-13. Players wearing "nothing special" are assumed to be wearing very boring underwear. How a player dresses their character is up to them, but items should not be written with an inherently racy undertone to them.
:* Avoid: Garter belt, halter-top, panties, thigh-high fishnet stockings, bra, bikini, boxers, ANY "adult toys"
:* Generally Okay: garter (wedding garter), halter-neck top, bustier, bandeau, chemise, corset, loincloth
:* Avoid collars (outside priest collars used for that purpose). "Choker", "scarf", and "torque" are better alternatives.


===Magic & Lighting===
* The words "rune", "sigil", and "glyph" are reserved for the magic and enchanting systems and are not permitted. Using these on items inherently implies they are magical. Even actual magical items should also not have these terms unless they were originally designed to have runes, sigils, or glyphs on them.
:* Other synonyms, such as "symbols", "markings", or "cursive script" are usually permitted. (Generally, the closest you can get is "symbols resembling celestial sigils" as celestial sigils generally have a defined look.)
* An item can be described as having light bouncing off it. This does not need any special modifiers such as "when the light hits it" or "in the light". It's generally assumed that if a player can see the item, there's enough light around for the item to also sparkle. However, a should not be described as 'brightly lit' all the time.
* Items cannot glow or otherwise emit their own light (unless one of its materials naturally glows). Shimmering and other similar words are acceptable. Even if a gem is described as "glowing", an item should not be made to "glow" by itself. Glowing is generally reserved for scripted or magical items (gaethzen for example).
:: Good: "sparkling", "gleaming", "scintillating", "shining", "glistening", "shimmering", "brilliant", "vivid", etc
:: Bad: "glowing", "pulsating", "burning", "incandescent", "luminescent"
:: Grey area: "luminous", "fiery"

===An Item's History===
The history of the item cannot be described, as a stranger looking at it would have no way of knowing this information:
The history of the item cannot be described, as a stranger looking at it would have no way of knowing this information:
* It is okay to artificially "age" an item during an alteration. However, the description should be what you can see in front of you -- while it may be apparent that an item has been "torn and then repaired several times", it's impossible to know that it's because a player "got in a fight with an angry hoard of badgers and came out victorious". Write what you see, not what the player knows what happened.
:* A good way to get around this is to make a small scene showing what happened.
:* Bad: "The backpack has been torn several times by angry badgers over the long years, and repaired by the steady hand of Catrox."
:* Better: "The backpack has been torn and repaired several times, apparent from the different threads used in each stitching. A small hoard of angry badgers is painted onto the front."
* As above, descriptions of the cause of damage to an item are not permitted. However, the damage itself is usually acceptable. (For example, you might describe a robe as "scorched" but can't say that the damage was caused by a lightning strike.)
* It is okay to use the word "worn" on an item as long as it's obvious it refers to age instead of it being physically worn. "Old" is also acceptable -- unclear if this is still true. The word "antique" should generally be avoided because it implies inflated value. Antiquated is not acceptable because it denotes age on items. The word "antiqued" is better as it could be referring to a process of apply fake aging.
* Descriptions of the origin, provenance, or chain of ownership of the item are not permitted.
* Descriptions of the origin, provenance, or chain of ownership of the item are not permitted.
* Descriptions of the cause of damage to an item are not permitted. However, the damage itself is usually acceptable. (For example, you might describe a robe as "scorched" but can't say that the damage was caused by a lightning strike.)
* Bloodstains are okay, but need to be dried blood (which is a rusty brown, not crimson). Where the blood came from should be ambiguous -- IE you should not describe it as "Human" blood or "leucro blood" or "pig blood". Pretty much all blood looks the same.

===How It's Worn===
* Some descriptions should specify "when worn" or similar phrasing to prevent confusion or strangeness when an item is not being worn.
* Items need to be described in a way that it makes sense no matter if it's on a player, in a backpack, stuffed in a vault, or lying on the ground. The item descriptions also need to be gender-neutral, and not use 'his' or 'her' pronouns unless scripted to handle that.
:* The easiest way to get around this rule is to use such as "cut to", "designed to", "made to". It's also acceptable to use "wearer" to some extent, which implies that if there isn't a wearer, the item isn't currently in that state.
:* Avoid: "the silk train drapes to the floor behind her".
:* Better: "the silk train is designed to drape to the floor behind the wearer".
* Also avoid describing the WEARER's body. For instance, "an evening dress cut to reveal the soft skin beneath" does not take into account Prydaens, S'Kra Mur, people with hardened or weathered skin, and so on.

===Use of Written Language===
Written language on items may appear in the TAP, LOOK, or READ of an item. In general, keep in mind that the size/nature of the item you are working with can and should influence the amount of written language it can contain. A 15-word phrase of 250+ characters on an earring or ring is jarringly unrealistic.

The following considerations can help guide your decisions while designing your items:

====Written Language in the READ====
The READ should be the default location for lengthy written text on an item. A player can describe the "flourishing embroidered phrase sweeping across the fabric" or the "spiraling words engraved into the metal" in their LOOK, but then just put the actual written text in the READ. This is particularly true if the phrase is one that would require more than 'at a glance' reading (e.g. more than 2 words). Written phrases in the READ should avoid having more than 10 words in them, should never exceed 15 words, and are surrounded by quotes with no additional text outside of the quotes.

====Written Language in the TAP====
Certain items that make logical sense to have a large written phrase that can be seen from a distance can have written text in the TAP. This includes things such as titles on books, phrases on badges, or slogans on t-shirt. In contrast, the TAP is not a place to casually add a permanent written "label" on any random sort of item. Written language on a TAP should generally be 1 or 2 words (an additional connecting word may be ok), and are surrounded by quotes. The overall TAP should still comply with standard character length requirements.

====Written Language in the LOOK====
The LOOK may be used for short, label-like descriptions that are not appropriate for the TAP given the nature of the item in question. These sort of written statements in the LOOK should only require 'at a glance' effort to read all at once (e.g. 1 or 2 words) and are surrounded by quotes. Something like a silver ring could reasonably have a LOOK of "The flawlessly polished metal is etched with the phrase "My Heart" on the inner band."

===Style: Races, Locations & Guilds===
Places, provinces, and cities are always capitalized. This includes in items.

Races are always capitalized. This includes in items. The proper spellings are as follows:
: {| class="wikitable sortable"
! Singular !! Plural !! Race !! Item !! Language
|-
| [[Human]] || Humans || the Human race || a Human [item] || [[Gamgweth]]
|-
| [[Dwarf]] || Dwarves || the Dwarven race || a Dwarven [item] || [[Haakish]]
|-
| [[Elf]] || Elves || the Elven race || an Elven [item] || [[Ilithic]]
|-
| [[Halfling]] || Halflings || the Halfling race || a Halfling [item] || [[Olvio]]
|-
| [[Gor'Tog]]&thinsp;<sup>1</sup> || Gor'Togs || the Gor'Tog race || a Gor'Tog or Toggish [item] || [[Toggish]]
|-
| [[Elothean]] || Elotheans || the Elothean race || an Elothean [item] || [[Gerenshuge]]
|-
| [[S'Kra Mur]]&thinsp;<sup>2</sup> || S'Kra Mur || the S'Kra Mur race || a S'Kra [item] || [[S'Kra Language|S'Kra]] (spoken) or [[Eth'ral'khh]] (written)
|-
| [[Gnome]] || Gnomes || the Gnome race || a Gnomish [item] || [[Gorbesh]]
|-
| [[Kaldar]] || Kaldar || the Kaldar race || a Kaldaran [item] || Gorbesh
|-
| [[Prydaen]] || Prydaens || the Prydaen race || a Prydaen item || [[Prydaenese]]
|-
| [[Rakash]] || Rakash || the Rakash race || a Rakash item || [[Rakash (language)|Rakash]]
|}
:# Gor'Tog can be informally shortened to "Tog".
:# S'Kra Mur can be informally shortened to "S'Kra".

An example of singular, plural, race, and item:
: Singular: He is an Elf.
: Plural: There are four Elves over there.
: Race: The Elven people have many different clans.
: Item: This is an Elven longsword.

Profession names are capitalized when talking about the profession as a whole, but not when talking about an individual. The proper spelling is as follows:
: {| class="wikitable sortable"
! Profession !! Individual
|-
| Paladins' Guild || a paladin
|-
| Barbarians' Guild || a barbarian
|-
| Rangers' Guild || a ranger
|-
| Clerics' Guild || a cleric
|-
| Empaths' Guild || an empath
|-
| Warrior Mage Guild || a warrior mage&thinsp;<sup>1</sup>
|-
| Thieves' Guild || a thief
|-
| Moon Mage Guild || a moon mage
|-
| Bards' Guild || a bard
|-
| Traders' Guild || a trader
|-
| Necromancer Guild || a necromancer&thinsp;<sup>2</sup>
|}
:# "warrior mage" can be informally shortened to "war mage".
:# "necromancer" can be shortened to "necro".

* Avoid using "cutesy" names like "pally", "warmie", "teef", "moonie", etc in items except within quotes, preferably within the READ or LOOK.

===Material Changes===
====General Items====
Generally speaking you can change the base materials of clothing, containers, and fluff items. Don't change the essence of what the item ''fundamentally is''.

====Weapons & Armor====
With regard to weapons, shields, armor, and brawling gear: if a specific material is specified in the tap you may not change the item to be constructed of something else entirely.

# Merchants will not change the functional (base) material of these items, even if the materials are of a comparable tier.
#* A tyrium greatsword cannot become a coralite greatsword.
#* Partially, this has to do with the fact that different materials create a different template. And, if it is forged and reclaimed, someone down the line could be really confused as to why their silversteel sword gave them a hunk of regular old steel.
# If the material is not explicitly stated, merchants will not say that it is made of a particular material, even if the material is of a comparable tier.
#* An acid-etched greatsword cannot become a tyrium greatsword.
# Merchants can ''omit'' mention of the base material in most cases.
#* A steel greatsword can become an acid-etched greatsword.

That being said, you can enhance or embellish weapons and armor with rare materials. Examples might include inlays, edging, plating, hilts, etc.

The amount needed depends on what you are having altered and how much is called for in the design. For example, a single silversteel ring is not going to have enough metal to plate a tower shield.

For purely cosmetic applications (alterations), the fodder material doesn't need to be crafting grade or pure. It can be part of another existing item (as long as you are willing to sacrifice the entire item).


===Noun Changes===
===Noun Changes===
====General Items====
A dress can change into a gown – they are both the same thing, usually worn in the same place! A pack can be a rucksack – they're both the same thing, usually worn in the same place! Shoes can be boots, or slippers, or heels. These changes are ok! A ball can be a globe, a medallion can be a medal. A charm can be a trinket! But if we're changing it, it has to make sense for the item and match the worn place. (A dress could not become a skirt, because those items are worn in different slots.)


Some merchants are willing to change the noun to a racial noun when appropriate. For example, a "robe" might become a "gamantang" or an "odaj."
As a general rule, '''the noun cannot be changed for weapons, shield, or armor,''' even if it's the same crafting template or type of weapon.


As a ''very'' general rule of thumb for noun changes for worn fluff, at a minimum, merchants are usually looking for all of the following conditions to be met:
Noun changes for other items are often permitted if it's a similar type of item, such as dress -> gown or backpack -> pack.
# The two nouns are roughly synonymous (e.g., a dress might become a gown but not a tunic).
# The two nouns would be worn in the same [[Inventory (concept)|slot]].
# The desired noun is available in a 24/7 shop.


Bear in mind that merchants may have their own rules or professional standards, and some items might have mechanical reasons for restrictions on noun changes.
Note: Some merchants are willing to change the noun to a racial noun when appropriate. For example, a "robe" might become a "gamantang" or an "odaj."


'''Note:''' An example of an item from years ago with an incorrect worn-place is not justification to make your item a thing it doesn't make sense to be!
===Maker's Marks===

The GM handling your alteration has the final say, and this post should in no way be construed as a guarantee that a noun change will be allowed, even if conditions 1-3 are met. If they say no, that means no.

====Racial Noun Changes====
Racial nouns are... distinct. There's typically there's a reason that makes it separate in some way.

Like, a chmir is designed around the Prydaen form. It's similar in fashion to a dress, but it's not... exactly a dress. Or a safos - but again, it's a style of dress but it's a specific style designed with the Rakash form in mind.

So, we can swap things like dress/gown - but we wouldn't swap the racial variant in for the generic via a scroll. You, might... find a live merchant who's willing to do that thing. But it would most likely be someone who specializes IN garments for the particular racial style you're asking for.

====Weapons & Armor====
Weapons and armor have templates. Many systems touch them, and they should generally be left alone. When a katana is made it uses a katana template. A sword has a sword template.

'''Now, as a general rule the noun is not alterable.''' There is a slim chance that you may happen across a special merchant who is run by a GM that has the knowledge and ability to see what else a certain template touches, what other systems are effected by the templates, and make modifications so as to not break your thing in the certain circumstances that you touch another one of those systems with it.

The number of GameMasters approved to make these changes on the fly is very low and those with the necessary clearances generally do not have much time for performing alterations.

It’s not a never thing but it is super rare and if the merchant says no that means that they literally can’t.

===Special Items with Specific Rules===
====[[Chippable weapons|Chippable Weapons]]====
Typically, [[chippable weapons]] (or chipper weapons) require a special alterer, such as [[Vomna]]. These weapons must follow general alteration rules by default. (Make sure to review those above, including weapon specific rules.) Chipper weapon alterations can ''sometimes'' include cosmetically altering a weapon (TAP, LOOK, and/or READ) as well as changing it to a chipper weapon.

There are some limitations on what can and cannot be a chippable weapon.
* Must be a melee weapon.
* May be a weapon with an [[Enchanting skill#Flares and Glamours|enchanted flare]].
* May be an item that has two templates, with the understanding that ''THROWN'' attacks ({{com|lob}}, {{com|hurl}}, {{com|throw}}) will not trigger the chip mechanic. This applies to items such as the [[hhr'ata]], [[throwing hammer]], [[throwing club]].
* May be an item that can be used at pole weapon range. This applies to [[staves]] and [[polearms]].


Some types of weapons will not be compatible for chipper transformation. This is is largely due to the inability of any item to have two scripts. Some examples of incompatible weapons:
* [[:Category:Brawling items|Brawling weapons]] ie: elbow spikes, knee spikes, hand claws, knuckles, parry sticks, footwraps
* [[Exoskeletal weapons]]
* [[Weapon:Polished_steel_katavdar_with_serrated_edges|katavdar tailbands]]
* Paladin [[Holy weapon]]s
* Ranged weapons ie: [[throwing dagger]]s, [[crossbow]]s, [[sling]]s, [[bow]]s, and their variants.
* [[Throwing blades|Stackable thrown weapons]] ie: [[:Weapon:glaes throwing stars|glaes throwing stars]]
* Swappable weapons ie: [[bastard sword]]s and [[riste]]s
* [[T'Kashi mirror weapon]]s
* [[:Category:Gore_Weapons|Gore weapons]]

=====Chip Specific Rules=====
* Chip noun must be an existing noun in the game. ie: sliver, chip, incisor, rock, pebble, shard
* Chip noun must be pluralized by adding a single "''s''". ie: sliver/slivers
* Only the SHORT TAP may be altered. See [[Alteration#String Limits|String Limits]].
* The chip weapon damage type may be chosen as '''puncture''', '''slice''', or '''impact'''. You may choose only one. The template points are not freely adjustable.
* The chip type must make sense for the existing construction of the weapon.
* The chip color must be an existing or allowed color for its material type.
* Chip material may not be a rare material.

====Instruments====
* Instrument material cannot be changed via scroll alterations.
* Only a live alterer can change the composition of an instrument (wood to metal for example) and only if it makes sense.
* A live alterer can change the appraisal of your instrument but not the difficulty of the instrument.


====Maker's Marks====
=====Incorporating Marks=====
[[Maker's mark]]s on player-made equipment have some special rules:
[[Maker's mark]]s on player-made equipment have some special rules:
* '''If a mark is present on a piece of equipment, it must be incorporated in the new design'''. This are no exceptions, even if the crafter is present to waive the restriction.
* '''If a mark is present on a piece of equipment, it must be incorporated in the new design'''. There are no exceptions, even if the crafter is present to waive the requirement.
* Custom maker's marks must retain their full mark in its original form. A custom mark could theoretically be moved from into the READ, assuming such a change makes sense contextually.
* On standard marks, you do NOT have to keep the exact wording (e.g. "You see the initials 'C. M.' impressed into the surface of the metal"). You can change it to something similar as long as the mark and initials remains on the item.
* If a mark is not present on an item, and you want to add it to the item, the merchant must be able to independently verify who made it. There appears to be a short window of time (a few days) in which it is possible to tell who made it even without a mark.<ref>Personal alteration experience</ref>
* If a mark is not present on an item, and you want to add it to the item, the merchant must be able to independently verify who made it. There appears to be a short window of time (a few days) in which it is possible to tell who made it even without a mark.<ref>Personal alteration experience</ref>


=====[[Custom Maker's Marks (new)|Custom Mark Creation]]=====
===Magical/Scripted Items===
* You must provide your own basic stamp. Work cannot be performed on someone else's stamp.
* Design can be no more than 150 characters in length, and will be automatically prefixed with with "the image of" and appended "with impressed into the material's surface" (not counted in character count limit).
* This is an actual, physical marking. The design cannot be animated or magical, nor can it shimmer or shine. There is no guarantee of complete uniqueness — some elements may be shared with other stamps.


====[[Prayer mat|Prayer Mat]]====
* Prayer mat alterations (even if just cosmetic) are limited to live merchants.
* Alterations may or may not include a deity change in addition to a SHORT, TAP, LOOK, and READ change.
* [[Lasto]] whispers, "Prayer mats must remain one of the Thirteen or their aspects."

====[[Shadow Servant]]s====
* The noun must remain "Servant" and the TAP must keep "Shadow Servant" in it. Both words must remain capitalized.
* Shadow Servants must have arms, a mouth, and a stomach. Their anatomy beyond this is flexible.
* Shadow Servants are made of shadows only. No additional colors, clothing, or items may be added.
* In terms of size, Servants are roughly humanoid sized and must remain this way.
* Shadow Servants are docile. Their look cannot imply hostility or intimidation in any form.
** Adjectives already in use by the system are permitted so long as additional wording does not introduce hostility or intimidation.
*** System adjectives (Incomplete) - ''brooding, cantankerous, disagreeable, gloomy, glowering, grumpy, hunchbacked, indolent, lethargic, looming, lugubrious, misshapen, morose, obstreperous, ornery, ponderous, sluggish, sulking, sullen, surly''.
* Adjectives that have been made available on tokens such as [[Item:Shadowy hollow token|shadowy hollow token]] are not necessarily permitted, because these are items available for a limited time.

====[[Signet ring|Signet rings]] (MAIL system)====
* Currently, only the TAP/LOOK is possible to alter via LTB scroll. A live merchant is required to alter the impression.
* You can change them like any normal ring with the TAP/LOOK/READ. You would also customize what the imprint of them comes out like.
* When creating seals, ensure it makes sense when plugged into this: "It is imprinted with a seal depicting {your customized imprint}."
* The customized imprint should not exceed 80 characters. If you are designing a monogram, it should not contain more than two or three initials.
* Keep in mind for the imprints you create - this is a tiny imprinted image. It can be fairly detailed, but keep the size in mind! We won't be putting a big scene on them.
* The ring doesn't need to remain a "signet ring". If "signet ring" doesn't remain in the TAP, it should probably be described in the LOOK to be clear that it's what it does.
* An existing custom maker's mark design can be used for a signet ring. As long as it will fit within the character limitations and make sense for the level of detail.
* Much like a normal alteration or custom features, it's completely possible to duplicate someone else's design - either intentionally or by accident.

There is currently a quirk where the LOOK of the signet ring will contain two lines. The second line of the LOOK contains the signet ring's impression. The 2nd line will not be visible when SHOWing the ring to others.

====[[Eddy]]====
* The noun *must* remain an EDDY.
* The eddy must remain a moving bright colored light.
* The light can't be divine, holy, shadowy, or dark. The light can't be sunlight, starlight, or moonlight, but it can resemble it.
* The light needs to be constrained/contained in a physical object and the interior can't be described beyond the watery portal.

====[[Item:Gold-speckled coralite yiamura with sharkstone spines|Yiamuru]]====
* The noun must remain "yiamura".
* Must remain a starfish shape, with three arms instead of the typical five arms.
* Cosmetic aspects outside of noun and shape may be altered.

===Magical/Scripted Items===
Many items with special magical effects or scripts can only be worked on by certain merchants. Please ask in advance and come prepared with a Plan B in case your merchant cannot work on the item.
Many items with special magical effects or scripts can only be worked on by certain merchants. Please ask in advance and come prepared with a Plan B in case your merchant cannot work on the item.


Additionally, some items (such as the {{ilink|i|dull serpent earcuff}} have special alteration rules or cannot be altered at all. If known, such rules or limitations will be described on the relevant item page.
Additionally, some items (such as the {{ilink|i|dull serpent earcuff}}) have special alteration rules or cannot be altered at all. If known, such rules or limitations will be described on the relevant item page.


Note: generally, an item cannot have two scripts. For example, feature-modifying jewelry can not also function as a magical item hider.
;Note: generally, an item cannot have two scripts. Some examples...
* Feature-modifying jewelry cannot also function as a magical item hider.
* Holy weapons cannot have soulstones added.
* The hold-x-items containers cannot have ice-veined leather added.
* Shimmering (color-changing) clothing cannot have additional verbs added. The color variable must be in the Short and Tap, but can not appear in the look.


Examples of items with magical effects or scripts that may require a special merchant:
;Examples of items with magical effects or scripts that may require a special merchant:
* ashcloaks
* atmospheric items
* atmospheric items (ie: [[drifters|drifters, floaters, or floaties]])
* [[cambrinth]]
* [[cambrinth]]
* [[chakrel]]
* [[chakrel]]
* [[chippable weapons]] ([[Alteration#Items#ChippableWeapons|See above.]])
* feature-modifying items (see below)
* feature-modifying items ([[Alteration#Feature-modifying_Items|See below]].)
* flying brooms or carpets
* [[:Category:Flying brooms|flying brooms]] or [[:Category:Flying carpets|flying carpets]]
* [[:Category:Item_hiders#Magical|magical item hiders]] (you may now combine as many hiding mechanics as you want, provided the merchant works on such items)
* [[Holy weapon|Holy Weapon]]<nowiki/>s (Requires [[Hrinagri]]<ref>https://discord.com/channels/619301383451181075/619612851727761428/1292321797781458944</ref>, a live merchant)
* passive stat regenerating items, such as {{ilink|i|dull serpent earcuff|dull serpent earcuffs}}
* [[:Category:Item_hiders#Magical|magical item hiders]] (You may now combine as many hiding mechanics as you want, provided the merchant works on such items.)
* pets
* [[orlog]]s
* [[Pilgrim's badge|pilgrim's badges]] (only the tap can be altered, not the look)
* [[Regeneration Items|passive stat regenerating items]] (ie:{{ilink|i|dull serpent earcuff|dull serpent earcuffs}})
* [[Focus_(item)|ritual foci}}
* [[soulstone|soulstones]] (special verbs may be lost by the addition of a soulstone)
* [[pilgrim's badge|pilgrim's badges]] (Only the tap can be altered, not the look.)
* [[prayer mat]]s (See [[Alteration#Prayer Mat|Prayer Mat section]].)
* spell-casting items
* [[focus_(item)|ritual foci]] and [[Focus_(item)#Targeted_Magic_Focus|Targeted Magic foci]].
* [[soulstone|soulstones]] (Special verbs may be lost by the addition of a soulstone.)
* [[wands|spell-casting items]] (ie: wands, rattles, items that cast a specific [[Spell]])
* [[vanity pet]]s (ie: [[Item:Rat|rats]], [[Item:Kitten|kittens]], [[Item:Pig|pigs]], [[Item:Monkey|monkeys]].)
* [[:Category:Whisper charms|whisper charms]] (Requires live (in-person) merchant.)



====Feature-modifying Items====
===Feature-modifying Items===
;Q - Can they be altered?
;Q - Can they be altered?
:A - Yes, they can be altered, but only the {{tt|TAP}} usually shows up in features, and sometimes (depending on the setup) only the SHORT. Alterers likely will not change that setting in a session.
:A - Yes, they can be altered, but only the {{tt|TAP}} usually shows up in features, and sometimes (depending on the setup) only the SHORT. Alterers likely will not change that setting in a session.
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===Titles/Professions in Item Designs===
===Titles/Professions in Item Designs===


The guidelines for incorporating titles in items are basically as follows:
Unless the profession or title you want to use is listed below, you must display the title to prove that you have earned the right to use it. Additionally, the item design should explain how that title is appropriate. For example, a "legionary's" pack might be designed to be more comfortable on long marches.
# If it's not on this list of pre-approved titles, the character getting the alteration done will need to be able to wear the title.
# The title that ends up on the item will be lowercase and the same as the one worn (no mixing titles or using partial titles).
# The desired title needs to make sense as an item descriptor. (Some of our titles just don't work on items.)
# Ideally, the design should make it clear how that item is suited for the profession being used as a descriptor. For example, a "legionary's" pack might have adjustable straps ensuring optimal weight distribution, reducing fatigue during long marches.


====Explicitly Permitted Titles====
====Explicitly Permitted Titles====
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{|
| valign="top" |
* actor
* actor
* advocate
* advocate
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* clothworker
* clothworker
* cook
* cook
| valign="top" |
* cooper
* cooper
* copyist
* copyist
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* jongleur
* jongleur
* judge
* judge
| valign="top" |
* knight
* knight
* laborer
* laborer
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* rugmaker
* rugmaker
* sailor
* sailor
| valign="top" |
* scabbard maker
* scabbard maker
* sculptor
* sculptor
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* woodcutter
* woodcutter
* wood seller
* wood seller
|}
}}


====Prohibited Titles====
====Prohibited Titles====
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* '''Torturer''': This includes any items with torture-related names or descriptions.
* '''Torturer''': This includes any items with torture-related names or descriptions.


Do not ask for any adornment or description with wording that signifies a special military rank, governmental position, royal connections or appointments. The exception to this rule is the title "captain" for nautical/boat themed items. Any ranks above captain (admiral, etc.) aRE, however, subject to this rule.
Do not ask for any adornment or description with wording that signifies a special military rank, governmental position, royal connections or appointments. The exception to this rule is the title "captain" for nautical/boat themed items. Any ranks above captain (admiral, etc.) ARE, however, subject to this rule.


Avoid requesting an alteration that mentions a reference to royal ancestors or divine lineage. We want to try to keep historic lore within that which has been approved for the game. Likewise, we have a distinguished list of gods and goddesses and feel there are enough to go around.
Avoid requesting an alteration that mentions a reference to royal ancestors or divine lineage. We want to try to keep historic lore within that which has been approved for the game. Likewise, we have a distinguished list of gods and goddesses and feel there are enough to go around.


===Restricted Materials===
==Restricted Materials==
If you wish to use the below materials in an alteration you must provide them. This doesn't cover depictions of the materials (e.g. embroidery of a vela'tohr flower). Some of this information was taken from the list on the [http://sites.google.com/site/dragonrealmsweddings/Home/rare-materials DragonRealms Wedding Team website].
If you wish to use the below materials in an alteration you must provide them. This doesn't cover depictions of the materials (e.g. embroidery of a vela'tohr flower). Some of this information was taken from the list on the [http://sites.google.com/site/dragonrealmsweddings/Home/rare-materials DragonRealms Wedding Team website] and [https://sites.google.com/site/thewitchsworkshop/rare_materials Keishalae's list].


Some materials have special alteration rules or limitations. If known, such rules or limitations will be described on the relevant material page.
Some materials have special alteration rules or limitations. If known, such rules or limitations will be described on the relevant material page.
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Below is a partial list of restricted materials. Please check the relevant material's wiki page for any special materials you may be considering.
Below is a partial list of restricted materials. Please check the relevant material's wiki page for any special materials you may be considering.


====[[Fabric]]====
===[[Fabric]]===
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{|
{{#ask:[[provided for alterations::true]][[category:Fabric]]
| valign="top" |
|format=ul
* [[Albaran lace]]
|order=asc
* [[Faeweave|any material "woven by fae hands."]]
|limit=500
* [[Bloodlace]]
|link=subject
* [[Bluefire velvet]]
|?uses color =
* [[dragonar]]
|?alteration restriction notes =
* [[dragonfire brocade]]
}}
* [[duchess satin]]
}}
* [[Elven silk]]

* [[Elven wool]]
===Creature Parts===
* [[Elven snowlace]]
For alteration designs that include skins/leathers/bones from huntable creatures, [[Relative creature level|creature level]] determines whether players are required to provide these materials:<ref>GM [[Cordulia]], via [https://discord.com/channels/619301383451181075/619612851727761428/949467671815139441 this Discord post]</ref>
* [[eolienne]]
{| class="wikitable"
* [[gemfire velvet]]
! Creature Level !! Creature Rarity !! Required for Alterations
* [[ialalhe]]
|-
* [[icesilk]] (not suitable as thread for embroidery)
| < 100 || Available 24/7 || Common (does not need to be provided)
* [[Imperial Weave]]
|-
* [[khiynit]]
| ≥ 100 || Available 24/7 || Must be provided for alterations.
* [[Lava samite]]
|-
* [[Lotusweave|lotusweave]]
| Any || Not available 24/7<br>(Quests, Invasions, etc.) || Required for alterations, regardless of creature level.
* [[marblesilk]]
* [[moonspun silk]]
| valign="top" |
* [[Oceanmist satin]]
* [[petalette]]
* [[rosecloth]]
* [[ruazin wool]]
* [[Shadesatin]]
* [[silveress]]
* [[snowflake tulle]]
* [[Starlight velvet]]
* [[stormsilk]] (not suitable as thread for embroidery)
* [[sunkissed chiffon]]
* [[titanese]]
* [[turbaurs]]
* [[velakan linen]]/[[velakan wool]]
* [[watersilk]] (not suitable as thread for embroidery)
* [[whisperlayne]]
* [[windstorm gossamer]]
* [[zenganne]]
* [[zerarin lace]]/[[zerarin wool]]
* [[zibeline]]
|}
|}


====Creature Parts and [[Leather]]====
====Furs & [[:Category:Leather|Leather]]====
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* [[diamond-hide]]
{{#ask:[[provided for alterations::true]][[category:Leather]]
* [[firecat pelt]] (has magical properties in armor)
|format=ul
* [[hiro bear pelt]]s (This was from ice quest)
|order=asc
* [[Ice-veined leather]] (imbued with elemental magic)
|limit=1000
* [[jaguar pelt]]s
|link=subject
* [[meshor fox pelt]]s (This was from ice quest)
|?uses color =
* [[nightstalker silk|nightstalker/nightweaver/nightreaver silk]] (player to provide spinnerets)
|?alteration restriction notes =
* [[onyx-hide]]
}}
* [[serpentine-hide]]
}}
* [[Unicorn horn]]


====[[Metals]]====
====[[:Category:Bone|Bones]]====
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* [[animite]]
{{#ask:[[provided for alterations::true]][[category:Bone]]
* [[audrualm]]
|format=ul
* [[black gold]] (note: cannot be melted down to be added to another item, if made for weddings must have initials "A+D" somewhere on it)
|order=asc
* [[blue gold]]
|limit=100
* [[damite]]
|link=subject
* [[darkstone]]
|?uses color =
* [[glaes]]
|?alteration restriction notes =
* [[haralun]]
}}
* [[icesteel]]
}}
* [[Kertig]]'s Tears
* [[lumium]]
* [[mistglass]]
* [[moonsilver]] (Must stay its original type - 'regular' moonsilver, blackened, crimson, or blued)
* [[muracite]]
* [[niello]]
* [[niniam]]
* [[orichalcum]]
* [[silversteel]]
* [[tyrium]]
* [[vardite]]


====[[Stone (material)|Stones]]====
===[[Metals]]===
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{{#ask:[[provided for alterations::true]][[category:Metals]]
|format=ul
|order=asc
|limit=5000
|link=subject
|?uses color =
|?alteration restriction notes =
}}
}}


===[[Stone (material)|Stone]] & [[Runestones|Runestone Materials]]===
* [[Felstone]]
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* [[Nightstone]]
{{#ask:[[provided for alterations::true]][[category:Stone]]
* [[Senci]]
|format=ul
* [[Xenomite]]
|order=asc
|limit=500
|link=subject
|?uses color =
|?alteration restriction notes =
}}
}}


====[[Runestones|Runestone Materials]]====
===[[Woods]]===
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* [[Asketine]]
{{#ask:[[provided for alterations::true]][[category:Woods]]
* [[Avaes]]
|format=ul
* [[Axinite]]
|order=asc
* [[Azurite]]
|limit=500
* [[Calavarite]]
|link=subject
* [[Elbaite]]
|?uses color =
* [[Imnera]]
|?alteration restriction notes =
* [[Rhodonite]]
}}
* [[Scheelite]]
}}
* [[Selenite]]
* [[Sraeth]]
* [[Xibaryl]]
* [[Zengalmi]]
* [[Celestite]]
* [[Hafaltu]]
* [[Lemicule]]
* [[Erythrite]]
* [[Iheaneu'a]]
* [[Ilmenite]]


====[[Woods]]====
===[[Flowers]] & Plants===
Flower-specific guidelines as per GM [[Winna]], Nov 2018: ''Actual flowers need to be provided if actual flowers are intended to be in the altered item. For example, if a person wanted 'an elaborately woven wreath of dusky purple phofe flowers', they would need to provide the flowers. If they only wanted 'an elaborately woven wreath of sculpted silver phofe flowers', they would not need to provide the fresh flowers.''
* [[Adderwood]]
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* [[Alerce tree]]
{{#ask:[[provided for alterations::true]][[category:Rare flowers]]
* [[Azurelle]]
|format=ul
* [[Bocote]]
|order=asc
* [[Darkspine]]
|limit=500
* [[Diamondwood]]
|link=subject
* [[Dragonwood]]
|?uses color =
* [[Durian]]
|?alteration restriction notes =
* [[E'erdream]]
}}
* [[Glitvire]]
}}
* [[Gloomwood]]
* [[Goldwood]]
* [[Iroko tree]]
* [[Kapok]]
* [[Pozumshi]]
* [[Rockwood]]
* [[Smokewood]]
* [[Tamarak]]
* [[Tamboti]]
* [[Zingana tree]]


====[[Flowers]]====
===[[Gems]]===
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* [[Blazing Star flower]]
{{#ask:[[provided for alterations::true]][[category:Gems]]
* [[Item:Glythtide's Garden rose|clerical roses]] (Insanity rose, Betrothal rose, etc.)
|format=ul
* [[Dusk Rose]]
|order=asc
* [[fawn lily]]
|limit=1000
* [[ghost orchid]]
|link=subject
* [[golden Eu's Promise flower]]
|?uses color =
* [[Midwinter's Sickle]]
|?alteration restriction notes =
* [[moon lily]]
}}
* [[phofe flower]]
}}
* [[Queen of the night lily]], or Queen-of-the-night lily
* [[samatak|samatak blossoms]] - we don't do samatak anything for weddings, including flowers.
* [[tidal lily]]
* [[vela'tohr blossom]]s
* [[Velvet Lily]]


===Materials From Huntable Creatures===
====[[Gems]]====
In addition to the above specific restrictions, in general the following rules<ref>[https://discordapp.com/channels/619301383451181075/619612851727761428/949467671815139441 Notes on alterations using materials from huntable creatures, via Discord]</ref> apply to the use of materials taken from creatures which are huntable in-game:
{|
* If [[relative creature level|creature level]] is less than 100 and they are available in a 24/7 hunting area, the materials are considered common and not required to be provided for alterations.
| valign="top" |
* If either [[relative creature level|creature level]] is greater than or equal to 100, or the creature is not available in a 24/7 hunting area (quests, invasions, etc.), the materials must be provided for alterations.
* [[bearclaw emerald]]
* [[black diamond]]
* [[bloodmist garnet]]
* [[blue hawkseye]]
* [[blood ruby]]
* [[Cloud ruby]]
* [[crystaline dragon tear]]
* [[Dalaeji black sapphire]]
* [[demantoid garnet]]
* [[dragonfire amber]]
* [[dragon fire opal]]
* [[dragon's blood crystal]]
* [[dragon's eye ruby]]
* [[dragon's heart ruby]]
* [[dragon's scale sapphire]]
* [[dwalgim]]
* [[Ebon jackal's heart pearl]]
* [[Elamiri sapphire]]
* [[eldring]]
* [[fire agate]]
* [[fortune's star diamond]]
* [[forest's heart garnet]] (must be faceted)
* [[gemfire ruby]]
* [[gloamstone]]
* [[Heke'mhhg lazuli]]
* [[Hav'roth's Ambrosia]]
* [[Haze Sapphire]]s
* [[heartstone]]
* [[howlite]]
* [[Huntress diamond]]
* [[Idon's sapphire]]
* Imperial gems
:* [[Imperial ruby]]
:* [[Imperial sapphire]]
:* [[Imperial topaz]]
* [[Katamba's Spire]]
| valign="top" |
* [[lightning amethyst]]
* [[lion's heart topaz]] (must be faceted)
* [[molten-core diamond]]
* [[moon pearl]]
* [[Night Diamond]]s
* [[nightfire opal]]
* [[Pitch Pearl]]s
* [[Plumed agate]]
* [[red diamond]]
* [[royal star diamond]]
* [[sana'ati heart]]
* [[Scorpion diamond]]
* [[Serpent's head sapphire]]
* [[serpent's heart ruby]]
* [[Shrike's Eye Sapphire]]
* [[siato star emerald]]
* [[sky opal]]
* [[soulstone]]
* [[Spiritgem]]
* [[stormfire topaz]]
* [[summer's heart sapphire]] (must be faceted)
* [[sunderstone]]
* [[svelae]]
* [[Taisidon emerald]]
* [[Taisidonian pearl]]
* [[Teiro's Hate ruby]]
* [[tempest sapphire]]
* [[thealstone]]
* [[unicorn spinel]]
* [[violet's heart amethyst]] (must be faceted)
* [[viper's eye sapphire]]
* [[viperscale alexandrite]]
* [[volcano's heart citrine]] (must be faceted)
* [[Xibar topaz]]
* [[watermelon tourmaline]]
* [[wild horse jasper]]
* [[zephyr heart]]
|}
=====[[Blanve's Bounty]] Gems=====
* [[Vela'tohr Tourmaline]] (wedding usage counts as a verbed item)
* [[Orchid Alexandrite]] (wedding usage counts as a verbed item)
* [[Phantom Sapphire]] (wedding usage counts as a verbed item)
* [[Nimbus Garnet]] (wedding usage counts as a verbed item)
* [[Zenith Spinel]] (wedding usage counts as a verbed item)
* [[Mystic Topaz]] (wedding usage counts as a verbed item)


===Special Techniques & Processes===
{| cellpadding="20"
Some items are created with special techniques and processes and may have special rules. Items utilizing these processes may not be alterable, or may require a special merchant.
| valign="top" |
=====[[Planetary Gem]]s=====
* [[Elanthite]]
* [[Yavasite]]
* [[Xibarite]]
* [[Katambite]]
* [[Grazhite]]
* [[Verenite]]
* [[Estrildite]]
* [[Durgauldite]]
* [[Yoakenite]]
* [[Penhetite]]
* [[Szeldite]]
* [[Merewaldite]]
* [[Ismenite]]
* [[Morleenite]]
* [[Amlothite]]
* [[Dawgolite]]
* [[Er'qutrite]]
| valign="top" |
=====[[Immokokkon and Sons]] Gems=====
* [[glacier emerald]]
* [[moonspun ruby]]
* [[pink diamond]]
* [[saffron topaz]]
* [[starlight ruby]]
* [[sunset opal]]
* [[twilight sapphire]]
* [[winter emerald]]
* [[Midnight diamond]]
* [[Champagne diamond]]
* [[Smoke ruby]]
* [[Musparan gold sapphire]]
* [[lotus flower sapphire]]
* [[Zoluren white sapphire]]
* [[Frost flare opal]]
* [[Aurora opal]]
* [[Nature's Canopy emerald]]
* [[Ocean's Deep emerald]]
* [[Starfire topaz]]
* [[Zoluren Royal topaz]]
* [[Fire Maiden topaz]]
|}


This is not a definitive list. As always, the merchant has the final say.
==Tattoos==
===General rules===
These are mainly common sense, and shouldn't be considered a comprehensive list. As with all alterations, the alterer has the final say. This list also designed to provide information for Assisted Wedding tattoos, which may be very different than those provided by the average tattoo merchant (the main difference being that wedding tattoos can cover multiple body parts in the description).


* [[Firestaining]]
Tattoos are available for Queen's and King's weddings. There is a maximum of two per wedding, and they go to the couple only -- so no tat for the mother-in-law. They also count as a verbed item slot.
* [[Lifesculpting]]
* [[Bardic Knot|Bardic Knots]]


==Features==
Generally speaking:
* [[Alteration/Feature|Feature]]: changing text features in your character's {{com|look}}
* Tattoos cannot appear to move on their own.
* As with all wedding alterations, they must not be sexually themed or be inappropriate for a family game.
* No tattoos with pictures of people mentioning only their name. How do I know that's your neighbor Samantha on your bicep? I wouldn't, but I would be able to see a blonde with green eyes perched on a boar.
* Tattoos are ink only. No throwing gems on top, scarification, branding, etc.
* Limit for the length of tattoos is approximately 512 characters, spaces included. Don't forget that in DR, we double space between sentences!
* Tattoos must begin with "She/He has a tattoo of" and end with "on his/her (area)".


===Tattoo Rules for Prydaen===
==[[Tattoo]]s==
{{:Alteration/Tattoo}}
Prydaen tattoos should be kept minimal and on areas where the fur is likely to be thin or sparse (like limbs, wrists, cheeks). Something on a back or chest or the like would never actually show up unless they are bald in that area.

===Valid Areas===
{|
|* face
* neck
* arm
* chest (male) / shoulder (female)
* back
* leg
* hand
* ankle
* wrist
* tail
* shoulder
|* forehead
* cheekbone
* thigh
* left wrist
* right wrist
* chest
* abdomen
* forearm
* chin
* left cheekbone
* right cheekbone
|* calf
* left ankle
* right ankle
* left temple
* right temple
* left hip
* right hip
* lower back
* left palm
* right palm
* right knuckles
|* left knuckles
* upper lip
* lower lip
* lips
* shins
* knees
* right shin
* left shin
* right knee
* left knee
* scalp (only if a bald race)
|}


==Titles==
==Titles==
* These rules apply only to pre- and post-titles. [[Affiliation Titles|Affiliation titles]] ("of XYZ") are not available via alteration.
* 2 words, maximum
* 20 characters, maximum (may have a very LITTLE wiggle room here)
* 2 words, maximum. (Adding connecting words is ok within reason.)
* 20 characters, maximum (May have a very LITTLE wiggle room here.)
* Title cannot currently be in the system.
* Title cannot currently be in the system.
* If your request uses a title that is in the system, you must meet all requirements for that title. If I wanted "Mystic Scythe", for example, I'd need to be able to display the [[Title:Mystic|Mystic]] title to the GM working on it in order to use the title.
* If your request uses a title that is in the system, you '''must''' meet all requirements for that title. Please use the {{com|TITLE}} {{tt|FIND}} command for your requested title. You must qualify for all parts of your request. If you want to use "Guardian Knight" then you must check both "guardian" and "knight" to be sure that you qualify for both. You must display anything that is bound by a requirement, so be prepared to put those titles on.
* The GM working with you has the final say on the title.
* The GM working with you has the final say on the title.
* Please do NOT pick up the custom title pins with only one title in mind. If your initial choice is turned down, there are no refunds on these pins. You should only get a custom title pin if you have numerous potential titles in mind.
* Please do NOT pick up the custom title pins with only one title in mind. If your initial choice is turned down, there are no refunds on these pins. You should only get a custom title pin if you have numerous potential titles in mind.


==Creatures==
==Creatures==
* [[Post:Current Familiar Alteration Guidelines - 11/6/2010 - 16:22:04|Familiar Alteration Rules]]
* [[Post:Biomechanical_Tarantula_Alteration_Guidelines_-_11/08/2019_-_10:20|Biomechanical Tarantula Rules]]
* [[Post:Shadow Servant Alteration Guidelines - 10/31/2013 - 23:45‎|Shadow Servant Alteration Rules]]
* [[Post:Current Familiar Alteration Guidelines - 11/6/2010 - 16:22:04|Familiar Alteration Rules]] - Limited to one familiar alteration per character.
* [[Post:Living Spider Cloak Alteration Guidelines - 11/13/2021 - 20:37|Living Spider Cloak Alteration Guidelines]]
* [[Vanity_pet#Alterations|Vanity Pet Alteration Rules]]


==Spell Customizations==
==Specific SubTypes==
* [[Alteration/Circle_of_Sympathy|Circle of Sympathy Alteration Guidelines]]
* [[Alteration/Embrace_of_the_Vela'tohr|Embrace of the Vela'Tohr Alteration Guidelines]]
* [[Alteration/Guardian_Spirit|Guardian Spirit Alteration Guidelines]]
* [[Alteration/Shadowling|Shadowling Alteration Guidelines]]
* [[Moongate#Alteration_Guidelines|Moongate Alteration Guidelines]]
* [[Post:Shadow Servant Alteration Guidelines - 10/31/2013 - 23:45‎|Shadow Servant Alteration Guidelines]]
* [[Alteration/Banner of Truce|Banner of Truce Alteration Guidelines]]

==Miscellaneous Alterations==
* [[Embiggening]]: enlarges containers to hold more items
* [[Embiggening]]: enlarges containers to hold more items
* [[Feature Alteration|Feature]]: changing text features in your character's {{com|look}}
* [[Rebecho]]: adds ties to items
* [[Rebecho]]: adds ties to items


== Proposed Tier System ==
A [https://discord.com/channels/619301383451181075/619612851727761428/1244440560203202620 ranking of alteration difficulty] has been distributed on the discord server. This was used to determine alteration cost during the [[Aesthene's Close 449]] event.

==Writing Tips==
===Show, Don't Tell===
We're in a text-based world, and rely on words to convey the images since graphics are absent. With that in mind: "show, don't tell." Or, to coin a phrase from school: "active versus passive voice."

Let us note here that passive voice is NOT incorrect by any means, and there are many people that prefer passive voice to active voice. It's a bit of a personal fingernail-on-chalkboard for some, and some GMs and Assistants will try and talk you out of it, but it's NOT incorrect. However, the difference is that passive voice tends to "list" things, while active voice tends to "paint a picture". Active voice isn't an easy way to write for a lot of people, but if it's something you can get a handle on, you may find it more pleasant to read through. And, as a bonus, you may find that using active voice trims words out of the description, making it more concise.

===The "Flow" of Your Alteration===
Your inventory is normally in an arranged order, flowing from head to toe in a logical sequence.

Your alteration should probably do the same. There are many options when considering the flow of an item: back to front, front to back, top to bottom. Broad to detailed, or vice versa. It doesn't matter which direction you choose, but choose one and go with it. Consider the following:

: '''Option 1:''' The cloak features a sequined red fox across the back, tail curled and brushing the hem. A ruby clasp framed in gold closes the garment, while red-tipped fox fur lines the hood. Tiny rubies stitched along the hem complement the clasp, and brush the sequined tail. The body of the cloak is lined with snowbeast fur.

: '''Option 2:''' The cloak features a sequined red fox across the back, tail curled and brushing the hem. Red-tipped fox fur lines the hood, blending into the snowbeast fur that lines the body of the cloak. A ruby clasp framed in gold closes the garment, complementing the tiny rubies stitched along the hem.

Both options present the same features, but how does your eye flow in your imagination?

: '''Option 1:''' Back of cloak on the outside, front of the cloak, inside top of the cloak, bottom outside of the cloak to the bottom of the back of the outside of the cloak, inside body of the cloak.

: '''Option 2:''' Back of the cloak, inside of the cloak, front of the cloak, bottom of the cloak.

The eye of your imagination follows a more logical progression with Option 2, making you more inclined to have a full visual picture of the cloak when you are done reading.

===Other Tips===
# When you {{com|show}} an item to someone else they see the TAP, followed immediately by the LOOK. The first sentence of your item's description shouldn't rehash what you ''just said'' in the TAP. Avoid repeating yourself, particularly right out of the gate.
# Examine your word choices and phrasing. Do they work well together, across the alteration? If you're trying to evoke a certain feeling: using themetic words, or just swapping out a couple here or there, can help tremendously. Grab a thesaurus!
# If you've written something and aren't pleased with it, examine the structural bits. Read the whole thing and see if it works together. Excellent flow is often what separates good alterations from great ones.
::* Think about the cadence. Are your sentences all the same length and shape? Varying the sentence structure, even just slightly, can give your design a big boost.
::* Similarly, do all of your sentences start the same way? Watch out for overuse of "a/the". There are other great ways to begin.
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* [http://www.play.net/dr/info/alteration.asp General play.net alteration info]
* [http://www.play.net/dr/info/alteration.asp General play.net alteration info]
* [https://sites.google.com/site/dragonrealmsweddings/Home/rare-materials Wedding Team Rare Materials List]
* [https://sites.google.com/site/dragonrealmsweddings/Home/rare-materials Wedding Team Rare Materials List]
* [http://www.play.net/dr/info/profoccitem.asp Restricted and Permitted Titles List]
* [http://www.play.net/dr/info/profoccitem.asp Restricted and Permitted Titles List]
* [https://www.pinterest.com/simupinterest/ Simu's Pinterest boards for additional inspiration]
* [http://drservice.info/static/alterationbuddy.htm Etherian's Alteration Buddy character counter]

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Alterations are GM mediated custom changes to a facet of your character, usually an item. In most cases, these alterations are purely cosmetic, but sometimes additional factors can be added.

In addition, there is also a specific type called LTB Alterations or Premium alterations and Feature alteration that have their own special rules.

Process

Alterations can come from a variety of sources, but the two most common are merchant sessions and scroll alterations.

Merchant Sessions

Most common at festivals, alterers will show up either randomly or at prescheduled times. They will open a list, that when JOINed will place your name on said list. The list usually remains open for some time, to allow everyone to join, an occasionally it will remain open during the entire event. But usually, it will be closed after a decent amount of time, preventing any other joiners. At any point if you reconsider your decision to join the list, you may type LEAVE LIST to leave the alteration list. If the list has been closed, you will not be able to reJOIN it.

At this point, the alterer will usually either pick the first name (very uncommon) or a random name from the list (usual) to do work with. It should be noted, getting on the list does not guarantee work unless the alterer specifically states it. Some alterers will only work for five or ten people, others do multi-hour events working for fifty or more.

Like all alterations, all rare materials must be on hand and as well as payment required by the alterer. If your rare material 'fodder' is in many small pieces; compare the total volumes and make an educated guess on what your alteration will require. Put the like-type alteration materials in a simple pouch you won't want back. Keep any other materials separate to make the alterer's life easier.

Assistants

It has become more common in recent years for alterers to employ player assistants to do the initial examination of someone's idea, as these people tend to be experienced in the process. They'll help people with incomplete ideas enhance them, pick out any typos or rules violations, and just generally clean up the idea. While it is not required that the assistant's ideas be listened to, it is highly likely the alterer will not look favorably upon complete disregard of their rule corrections.

Role-playing Considerations

Role-playing considerations are always in play. This is the case with any live merchant anywhere, regardless of if it happens during a paid event or not. Live merchants are role-playing events.[1]

For example, if you're playing a Perverse-aligned character, it might not go well when you show up to a religious Rakash merchant.

Alteration Scrolls

Scroll alterations are often done either through the LTB system or as a reward for purchasing an event. These differ in that all contact with the alterer is done via an in-game item, the scroll, and depending on the complexity or requests, may take several days.

Not all alteration scrolls are equal. Depending on the scroll's source, the types of items you can have worked performed on will vary. More complex items require that the merchant processing your request have more clearances — not all GameMasters can work on all items. Some items cannot be altered via scroll, period.

Using Scrolls

  • Hold the object you want altered in your left hand before you write to this scroll.
  • To get rid of your alterer's scroll, you must DROP it. It will blow away after a little while. Once you drop a scroll, all information about your request will be erased, and you will need to get a new one from the merchant.
  • Once you have written to the scroll, you are free to put both items away, and go on about your business. You'll be notified when the merchant responds in any way. However, you will need to have the scroll in your possession in order to respond to any messages or suggestions the merchant makes.

Merchants have the final word. Read any posted information about what types of things the merchant alters and what rules the merchant uses.

Commands
  • WRITE CHANGE: Allows you to change the item you want to be altered. You must be holding the new item in your left hand when you used this option.
  • WRITE NEW {text}: Overwrites any existing request, but if the scroll is already associated with an item, it will not change that association (use CHANGE, in that case). You can use this to start over at any time prior to ACCEPTing the alteration and price.
  • WRITE REPLY {text}: Allows you to respond to a merchant's message.
  • WRITE ACCEPT: (Signs the alteration contract and authorizes the merchant to charge you and create the alteration.)
  • WRITE OFFER {amount} [province]: When a merchant gives you a price for the alteration, you can bargain a different price using this command. The optional province can be: ZOLUREN, THERENGIA, ILITHI or QI'RESHALIA
  • You ACCEPT after the merchant has approved either an alteration, or a counteroffer on the price for the alteration.

Scroll Types

LTB Scrolls

Generally speaking, this type of alteration will consist of a holdable/wearable, non-magical item that isn't heavily scripted. Cambrinth items are also acceptable. These are always cosmetic changes only.

Event-Tier Scrolls

Scrolls obtained through events can (again, generally speaking) be used on more complex items than Long-Term Benefit (premium) scrolls. As with LTB scrolls, any changes would be strictly cosmetic (only be to the tap/look/read, not to the functionality or messaging).

Examples of items you might be able to alter with Event scrolls but not with LTB scrolls: magical foci, and weapons/armor with flare enchantments.[2]

A comprehensive list of guidelines for Corn Maze scrolls can be found here.

Errors & Buyer's Remorse

Alterations are final. Once a design is agreed upon that's it. Please ensure that you're happy with the final results before leaving the session. Try not to feel rushed, or that you're holding up the line. Everyone involved in the process wants you to walk away with a product you'll be happy with. Sometimes that can take a while.

  • If you're attending a merchant session and cannot agree upon a design the "slot" can be refunded. You're not committed and can walk away. Just ask.
  • Items can be re-altered. Where and how you do that depends on what the item is. If it's something that can only be done by a merchant you'll have to resubmit it to a merchant.
  • If you have a typo (it happens) you can ASSIST about it.
  • If you just want to change something, though, it's treated as a new alteration. Another slot, another scroll, etc.

String Limits

Type Command To See Length/Guidelines
Item SHORT (base item) 15/15/15, "article,adjective,noun"
Item TAP INV HELD Cannot exceed 80 characters. No commas.
(including the leading article a/an/some and spaces)
Item LOOK LOOK [ITEM] Try to stay under 500 characters. 511 characters is the hard limit. (512+ gets truncated.)
Item READ READ [ITEM] 50 characters and 10 words
Face changing mask 250 characters when worn
Post room strings 80 characters and 10 words. No commas.
Atmospheric Messages Ideally the length of a TAP (around 80). Some wiggle room. Keep it as short as possible.
Titles 20 characters and 2 words. (Adding connecting words is ok within reason.)
Custom Maker's Marks 150 characters. Automatically prefixed with with "the image of" and appended "with impressed into the material's surface" (not counted in character count limit).
Custom DEPART messages No longer than 500 characters, including spacing and punctuation.
Custom login/logout messages Maximum 150 characters for what you see when you log in or out.
Maximum 90 characters for what shows up in the Arrivals window.
Signet ring impressions LOOK [ITEM] This field should not exceed 80 characters. If you are designing a monogram, it should not contain more than two or three initials.

Note: There must be two spaces between all sentences.

This tool can be helpful in keeping your alteration idea within character count limits: http://drservice.info/static/alterationbuddy.htm

Items

General Rules

  • The merchant has the final say.
  • Merchants generally do not add special mechanics or scripts to items.
  • Description from Limited Treasure items should be used with caution.
  • Merchants generally do not change where an item is worn or how much it can hold.
  • The short description is purely mechanical, and is how you interact with the item. It is setup 15/15/15, "article,adjective,noun".[3]
  • Players do not have to define this, as it's usually obvious and straightforward. If you have specific preferences, however, please state them to the merchant or their assistant.
  • The tap (the name of the item that you see when you type INV HELD) cannot exceed 80 characters (including the leading article a/an/some and spaces)
  • The tap cannot contain commas. (Commas serve as separators in inventory lists.)
  • The look (what you see when you type LOOK [ITEM]) cannot exceed 512 characters, including spaces and punctuation. (There must be two spaces between sentences.)
  • A read (what you see when you type READ [ITEM]) should be no more than 50 characters and 10 words. (Most writing should be in a separate read and not in the tap or look.)
  • Words or phrases in any racial language will have to be verified and may not be possible at all times.
  • Character names are generally not allowed.
  • Phrases and writing should ideally be in the READ and not the LOOK. Be aware that the system automatically appends the phrase "There appears to be something written on it." when the READ is populated, so having written text in both locations (or referring to the READ text in the LOOK) can occasionally produce awkward results.
  • If containers are being used as a source for material (and not the item altered), they must be empty.
  • Items named after a race are usually not permitted. For instance a Kaldaran shield needs to be specifically described in such a way that it can only be Kaldaran.

Out of Bounds

  • Items cannot dictate how people feel or react. (For example, your armor can't strike fear into the hearts of your enemies.)
  • Items cannot imply that they have mechanics they do not have. For example, stalking leathers can be "designed to aid stealth," but they do not actually and cannot be said to aid the wearer in moving about.
  • Obvious out-of-genre or out-of-character references/designs are not permitted.
  • Nothing obscene, vulgar, or sexually explicit is permitted.
  • Items in DragonRealms should generally not be more than PG-13. Players wearing "nothing special" are assumed to be wearing very boring underwear. How a player dresses their character is up to them, but items should not be written with an inherently racy undertone to them.
  • Avoid: Garter belt, halter-top, panties, thigh-high fishnet stockings, bra, bikini, boxers, ANY "adult toys"
  • Generally Okay: garter (wedding garter), halter-neck top, bustier, bandeau, chemise, corset, loincloth
  • Avoid collars (outside priest collars used for that purpose). "Choker", "scarf", and "torque" are better alternatives.

Magic & Lighting

  • The words "rune", "sigil", and "glyph" are reserved for the magic and enchanting systems and are not permitted. Using these on items inherently implies they are magical. Even actual magical items should also not have these terms unless they were originally designed to have runes, sigils, or glyphs on them.
  • Other synonyms, such as "symbols", "markings", or "cursive script" are usually permitted. (Generally, the closest you can get is "symbols resembling celestial sigils" as celestial sigils generally have a defined look.)
  • An item can be described as having light bouncing off it. This does not need any special modifiers such as "when the light hits it" or "in the light". It's generally assumed that if a player can see the item, there's enough light around for the item to also sparkle. However, a should not be described as 'brightly lit' all the time.
  • Items cannot glow or otherwise emit their own light (unless one of its materials naturally glows). Shimmering and other similar words are acceptable. Even if a gem is described as "glowing", an item should not be made to "glow" by itself. Glowing is generally reserved for scripted or magical items (gaethzen for example).
Good: "sparkling", "gleaming", "scintillating", "shining", "glistening", "shimmering", "brilliant", "vivid", etc
Bad: "glowing", "pulsating", "burning", "incandescent", "luminescent"
Grey area: "luminous", "fiery"

An Item's History

The history of the item cannot be described, as a stranger looking at it would have no way of knowing this information:

  • It is okay to artificially "age" an item during an alteration. However, the description should be what you can see in front of you -- while it may be apparent that an item has been "torn and then repaired several times", it's impossible to know that it's because a player "got in a fight with an angry hoard of badgers and came out victorious". Write what you see, not what the player knows what happened.
  • A good way to get around this is to make a small scene showing what happened.
  • Bad: "The backpack has been torn several times by angry badgers over the long years, and repaired by the steady hand of Catrox."
  • Better: "The backpack has been torn and repaired several times, apparent from the different threads used in each stitching. A small hoard of angry badgers is painted onto the front."
  • As above, descriptions of the cause of damage to an item are not permitted. However, the damage itself is usually acceptable. (For example, you might describe a robe as "scorched" but can't say that the damage was caused by a lightning strike.)
  • It is okay to use the word "worn" on an item as long as it's obvious it refers to age instead of it being physically worn. "Old" is also acceptable -- unclear if this is still true. The word "antique" should generally be avoided because it implies inflated value. Antiquated is not acceptable because it denotes age on items. The word "antiqued" is better as it could be referring to a process of apply fake aging.
  • Descriptions of the origin, provenance, or chain of ownership of the item are not permitted.
  • Bloodstains are okay, but need to be dried blood (which is a rusty brown, not crimson). Where the blood came from should be ambiguous -- IE you should not describe it as "Human" blood or "leucro blood" or "pig blood". Pretty much all blood looks the same.

How It's Worn

  • Some descriptions should specify "when worn" or similar phrasing to prevent confusion or strangeness when an item is not being worn.
  • Items need to be described in a way that it makes sense no matter if it's on a player, in a backpack, stuffed in a vault, or lying on the ground. The item descriptions also need to be gender-neutral, and not use 'his' or 'her' pronouns unless scripted to handle that.
  • The easiest way to get around this rule is to use such as "cut to", "designed to", "made to". It's also acceptable to use "wearer" to some extent, which implies that if there isn't a wearer, the item isn't currently in that state.
  • Avoid: "the silk train drapes to the floor behind her".
  • Better: "the silk train is designed to drape to the floor behind the wearer".
  • Also avoid describing the WEARER's body. For instance, "an evening dress cut to reveal the soft skin beneath" does not take into account Prydaens, S'Kra Mur, people with hardened or weathered skin, and so on.

Use of Written Language

Written language on items may appear in the TAP, LOOK, or READ of an item. In general, keep in mind that the size/nature of the item you are working with can and should influence the amount of written language it can contain. A 15-word phrase of 250+ characters on an earring or ring is jarringly unrealistic.

The following considerations can help guide your decisions while designing your items:

Written Language in the READ

The READ should be the default location for lengthy written text on an item. A player can describe the "flourishing embroidered phrase sweeping across the fabric" or the "spiraling words engraved into the metal" in their LOOK, but then just put the actual written text in the READ. This is particularly true if the phrase is one that would require more than 'at a glance' reading (e.g. more than 2 words). Written phrases in the READ should avoid having more than 10 words in them, should never exceed 15 words, and are surrounded by quotes with no additional text outside of the quotes.

Written Language in the TAP

Certain items that make logical sense to have a large written phrase that can be seen from a distance can have written text in the TAP. This includes things such as titles on books, phrases on badges, or slogans on t-shirt. In contrast, the TAP is not a place to casually add a permanent written "label" on any random sort of item. Written language on a TAP should generally be 1 or 2 words (an additional connecting word may be ok), and are surrounded by quotes. The overall TAP should still comply with standard character length requirements.

Written Language in the LOOK

The LOOK may be used for short, label-like descriptions that are not appropriate for the TAP given the nature of the item in question. These sort of written statements in the LOOK should only require 'at a glance' effort to read all at once (e.g. 1 or 2 words) and are surrounded by quotes. Something like a silver ring could reasonably have a LOOK of "The flawlessly polished metal is etched with the phrase "My Heart" on the inner band."

Style: Races, Locations & Guilds

Places, provinces, and cities are always capitalized. This includes in items.

Races are always capitalized. This includes in items. The proper spellings are as follows:

Singular Plural Race Item Language
Human Humans the Human race a Human [item] Gamgweth
Dwarf Dwarves the Dwarven race a Dwarven [item] Haakish
Elf Elves the Elven race an Elven [item] Ilithic
Halfling Halflings the Halfling race a Halfling [item] Olvio
Gor'Tog1 Gor'Togs the Gor'Tog race a Gor'Tog or Toggish [item] Toggish
Elothean Elotheans the Elothean race an Elothean [item] Gerenshuge
S'Kra Mur2 S'Kra Mur the S'Kra Mur race a S'Kra [item] S'Kra (spoken) or Eth'ral'khh (written)
Gnome Gnomes the Gnome race a Gnomish [item] Gorbesh
Kaldar Kaldar the Kaldar race a Kaldaran [item] Gorbesh
Prydaen Prydaens the Prydaen race a Prydaen item Prydaenese
Rakash Rakash the Rakash race a Rakash item Rakash
  1. Gor'Tog can be informally shortened to "Tog".
  2. S'Kra Mur can be informally shortened to "S'Kra".

An example of singular, plural, race, and item:

Singular: He is an Elf.
Plural: There are four Elves over there.
Race: The Elven people have many different clans.
Item: This is an Elven longsword.

Profession names are capitalized when talking about the profession as a whole, but not when talking about an individual. The proper spelling is as follows:

Profession Individual
Paladins' Guild a paladin
Barbarians' Guild a barbarian
Rangers' Guild a ranger
Clerics' Guild a cleric
Empaths' Guild an empath
Warrior Mage Guild a warrior mage 1
Thieves' Guild a thief
Moon Mage Guild a moon mage
Bards' Guild a bard
Traders' Guild a trader
Necromancer Guild a necromancer 2
  1. "warrior mage" can be informally shortened to "war mage".
  2. "necromancer" can be shortened to "necro".
  • Avoid using "cutesy" names like "pally", "warmie", "teef", "moonie", etc in items except within quotes, preferably within the READ or LOOK.

Material Changes

General Items

Generally speaking you can change the base materials of clothing, containers, and fluff items. Don't change the essence of what the item fundamentally is.

Weapons & Armor

With regard to weapons, shields, armor, and brawling gear: if a specific material is specified in the tap you may not change the item to be constructed of something else entirely.

  1. Merchants will not change the functional (base) material of these items, even if the materials are of a comparable tier.
    • A tyrium greatsword cannot become a coralite greatsword.
    • Partially, this has to do with the fact that different materials create a different template. And, if it is forged and reclaimed, someone down the line could be really confused as to why their silversteel sword gave them a hunk of regular old steel.
  2. If the material is not explicitly stated, merchants will not say that it is made of a particular material, even if the material is of a comparable tier.
    • An acid-etched greatsword cannot become a tyrium greatsword.
  3. Merchants can omit mention of the base material in most cases.
    • A steel greatsword can become an acid-etched greatsword.

That being said, you can enhance or embellish weapons and armor with rare materials. Examples might include inlays, edging, plating, hilts, etc.

The amount needed depends on what you are having altered and how much is called for in the design. For example, a single silversteel ring is not going to have enough metal to plate a tower shield.

For purely cosmetic applications (alterations), the fodder material doesn't need to be crafting grade or pure. It can be part of another existing item (as long as you are willing to sacrifice the entire item).

Noun Changes

General Items

A dress can change into a gown – they are both the same thing, usually worn in the same place! A pack can be a rucksack – they're both the same thing, usually worn in the same place! Shoes can be boots, or slippers, or heels. These changes are ok! A ball can be a globe, a medallion can be a medal. A charm can be a trinket! But if we're changing it, it has to make sense for the item and match the worn place. (A dress could not become a skirt, because those items are worn in different slots.)

Some merchants are willing to change the noun to a racial noun when appropriate. For example, a "robe" might become a "gamantang" or an "odaj."

As a very general rule of thumb for noun changes for worn fluff, at a minimum, merchants are usually looking for all of the following conditions to be met:

  1. The two nouns are roughly synonymous (e.g., a dress might become a gown but not a tunic).
  2. The two nouns would be worn in the same slot.
  3. The desired noun is available in a 24/7 shop.

Bear in mind that merchants may have their own rules or professional standards, and some items might have mechanical reasons for restrictions on noun changes.

Note: An example of an item from years ago with an incorrect worn-place is not justification to make your item a thing it doesn't make sense to be!

The GM handling your alteration has the final say, and this post should in no way be construed as a guarantee that a noun change will be allowed, even if conditions 1-3 are met. If they say no, that means no.

Racial Noun Changes

Racial nouns are... distinct. There's typically there's a reason that makes it separate in some way.

Like, a chmir is designed around the Prydaen form. It's similar in fashion to a dress, but it's not... exactly a dress. Or a safos - but again, it's a style of dress but it's a specific style designed with the Rakash form in mind.

So, we can swap things like dress/gown - but we wouldn't swap the racial variant in for the generic via a scroll. You, might... find a live merchant who's willing to do that thing. But it would most likely be someone who specializes IN garments for the particular racial style you're asking for.

Weapons & Armor

Weapons and armor have templates. Many systems touch them, and they should generally be left alone. When a katana is made it uses a katana template. A sword has a sword template.

Now, as a general rule the noun is not alterable. There is a slim chance that you may happen across a special merchant who is run by a GM that has the knowledge and ability to see what else a certain template touches, what other systems are effected by the templates, and make modifications so as to not break your thing in the certain circumstances that you touch another one of those systems with it.

The number of GameMasters approved to make these changes on the fly is very low and those with the necessary clearances generally do not have much time for performing alterations.

It’s not a never thing but it is super rare and if the merchant says no that means that they literally can’t.

Special Items with Specific Rules

Chippable Weapons

Typically, chippable weapons (or chipper weapons) require a special alterer, such as Vomna. These weapons must follow general alteration rules by default. (Make sure to review those above, including weapon specific rules.) Chipper weapon alterations can sometimes include cosmetically altering a weapon (TAP, LOOK, and/or READ) as well as changing it to a chipper weapon.

There are some limitations on what can and cannot be a chippable weapon.


Some types of weapons will not be compatible for chipper transformation. This is is largely due to the inability of any item to have two scripts. Some examples of incompatible weapons:

Chip Specific Rules
  • Chip noun must be an existing noun in the game. ie: sliver, chip, incisor, rock, pebble, shard
  • Chip noun must be pluralized by adding a single "s". ie: sliver/slivers
  • Only the SHORT TAP may be altered. See String Limits.
  • The chip weapon damage type may be chosen as puncture, slice, or impact. You may choose only one. The template points are not freely adjustable.
  • The chip type must make sense for the existing construction of the weapon.
  • The chip color must be an existing or allowed color for its material type.
  • Chip material may not be a rare material.

Instruments

  • Instrument material cannot be changed via scroll alterations.
  • Only a live alterer can change the composition of an instrument (wood to metal for example) and only if it makes sense.
  • A live alterer can change the appraisal of your instrument but not the difficulty of the instrument.


Maker's Marks

Incorporating Marks

Maker's marks on player-made equipment have some special rules:

  • If a mark is present on a piece of equipment, it must be incorporated in the new design. There are no exceptions, even if the crafter is present to waive the requirement.
  • Custom maker's marks must retain their full mark in its original form. A custom mark could theoretically be moved from into the READ, assuming such a change makes sense contextually.
  • On standard marks, you do NOT have to keep the exact wording (e.g. "You see the initials 'C. M.' impressed into the surface of the metal"). You can change it to something similar as long as the mark and initials remains on the item.
  • If a mark is not present on an item, and you want to add it to the item, the merchant must be able to independently verify who made it. There appears to be a short window of time (a few days) in which it is possible to tell who made it even without a mark.[4]
Custom Mark Creation
  • You must provide your own basic stamp. Work cannot be performed on someone else's stamp.
  • Design can be no more than 150 characters in length, and will be automatically prefixed with with "the image of" and appended "with impressed into the material's surface" (not counted in character count limit).
  • This is an actual, physical marking. The design cannot be animated or magical, nor can it shimmer or shine. There is no guarantee of complete uniqueness — some elements may be shared with other stamps.

Prayer Mat

  • Prayer mat alterations (even if just cosmetic) are limited to live merchants.
  • Alterations may or may not include a deity change in addition to a SHORT, TAP, LOOK, and READ change.
  • Lasto whispers, "Prayer mats must remain one of the Thirteen or their aspects."

Shadow Servants

  • The noun must remain "Servant" and the TAP must keep "Shadow Servant" in it. Both words must remain capitalized.
  • Shadow Servants must have arms, a mouth, and a stomach. Their anatomy beyond this is flexible.
  • Shadow Servants are made of shadows only. No additional colors, clothing, or items may be added.
  • In terms of size, Servants are roughly humanoid sized and must remain this way.
  • Shadow Servants are docile. Their look cannot imply hostility or intimidation in any form.
    • Adjectives already in use by the system are permitted so long as additional wording does not introduce hostility or intimidation.
      • System adjectives (Incomplete) - brooding, cantankerous, disagreeable, gloomy, glowering, grumpy, hunchbacked, indolent, lethargic, looming, lugubrious, misshapen, morose, obstreperous, ornery, ponderous, sluggish, sulking, sullen, surly.
  • Adjectives that have been made available on tokens such as shadowy hollow token are not necessarily permitted, because these are items available for a limited time.

Signet rings (MAIL system)

  • Currently, only the TAP/LOOK is possible to alter via LTB scroll. A live merchant is required to alter the impression.
  • You can change them like any normal ring with the TAP/LOOK/READ. You would also customize what the imprint of them comes out like.
  • When creating seals, ensure it makes sense when plugged into this: "It is imprinted with a seal depicting {your customized imprint}."
  • The customized imprint should not exceed 80 characters. If you are designing a monogram, it should not contain more than two or three initials.
  • Keep in mind for the imprints you create - this is a tiny imprinted image. It can be fairly detailed, but keep the size in mind! We won't be putting a big scene on them.
  • The ring doesn't need to remain a "signet ring". If "signet ring" doesn't remain in the TAP, it should probably be described in the LOOK to be clear that it's what it does.
  • An existing custom maker's mark design can be used for a signet ring. As long as it will fit within the character limitations and make sense for the level of detail.
  • Much like a normal alteration or custom features, it's completely possible to duplicate someone else's design - either intentionally or by accident.

There is currently a quirk where the LOOK of the signet ring will contain two lines. The second line of the LOOK contains the signet ring's impression. The 2nd line will not be visible when SHOWing the ring to others.

Eddy

  • The noun *must* remain an EDDY.
  • The eddy must remain a moving bright colored light.
  • The light can't be divine, holy, shadowy, or dark. The light can't be sunlight, starlight, or moonlight, but it can resemble it.
  • The light needs to be constrained/contained in a physical object and the interior can't be described beyond the watery portal.

Yiamuru

  • The noun must remain "yiamura".
  • Must remain a starfish shape, with three arms instead of the typical five arms.
  • Cosmetic aspects outside of noun and shape may be altered.

Magical/Scripted Items

Many items with special magical effects or scripts can only be worked on by certain merchants. Please ask in advance and come prepared with a Plan B in case your merchant cannot work on the item.

Additionally, some items (such as the dull serpent earcuff) have special alteration rules or cannot be altered at all. If known, such rules or limitations will be described on the relevant item page.

Note
generally, an item cannot have two scripts. Some examples...
  • Feature-modifying jewelry cannot also function as a magical item hider.
  • Holy weapons cannot have soulstones added.
  • The hold-x-items containers cannot have ice-veined leather added.
  • Shimmering (color-changing) clothing cannot have additional verbs added. The color variable must be in the Short and Tap, but can not appear in the look.
Examples of items with magical effects or scripts that may require a special merchant


Feature-modifying Items

Q - Can they be altered?
A - Yes, they can be altered, but only the TAP usually shows up in features, and sometimes (depending on the setup) only the SHORT. Alterers likely will not change that setting in a session.
Q - Can they be altered via LTB scroll?
A - Yes, but probably not "location" change.
Q - Are there any special rules (character limits, etc)?
A - No limits other than the normal. Because these can be pushed into the features and pulled out, the TAP should never mention anything about the features, it should only be the item.
Q - Is their script stackable with any other scripts (like hiders, etc.)?
A - Not stackable, but should work with beard jewelry script as well, so you can wear both.

Titles/Professions in Item Designs

The guidelines for incorporating titles in items are basically as follows:

  1. If it's not on this list of pre-approved titles, the character getting the alteration done will need to be able to wear the title.
  2. The title that ends up on the item will be lowercase and the same as the one worn (no mixing titles or using partial titles).
  3. The desired title needs to make sense as an item descriptor. (Some of our titles just don't work on items.)
  4. Ideally, the design should make it clear how that item is suited for the profession being used as a descriptor. For example, a "legionary's" pack might have adjustable straps ensuring optimal weight distribution, reducing fatigue during long marches.

Explicitly Permitted Titles

  • actor
  • advocate
  • alchemist
  • animal handler
  • apothecary
  • architect
  • archer
  • aristocrat
  • armorer
  • artisan
  • artist
  • astrologer
  • baker
  • banker
  • barber
  • barkeep
  • barmaid
  • beekeeper
  • beer seller
  • beggar
  • blacksmith
  • boatman
  • bookbinder
  • bookseller
  • brewer
  • buckle maker
  • builder
  • butcher
  • caravan leader
  • carpenter
  • cartographer
  • captain (nautical themed)
  • chandler
  • charioteer
  • chatelaine
  • chef
  • chieftain
  • chirurgeon (surgeon)
  • clergyman/clergywoman
  • clerk
  • clock maker
  • clothworker
  • cook
  • cooper
  • copyist
  • counselor
  • courtier
  • cowherd
  • crossbowman
  • cutler
  • dairymaid
  • diplomat
  • distiller
  • diver
  • diviner
  • domestic servant
  • explorer
  • farmer
  • fighter
  • first mate
  • fisherman
  • fishmonger
  • footman
  • furrier
  • gardener
  • gladiator
  • glovemaker
  • groom (animal groomer)
  • harness maker
  • hatmaker
  • hay merchant
  • hearthwitch
  • herald
  • herbalist
  • herder
  • hermit
  • highwayman
  • illuminator
  • innkeeper
  • interpreter
  • inventor
  • jailer
  • jester
  • jeweler
  • jongleur
  • judge
  • knight
  • laborer
  • lady
  • lady in waiting
  • leatherworker
  • locksmith
  • longbowman
  • maidservant
  • majordomo
  • man at arms
  • mason
  • mercer
  • merchant
  • messenger
  • midwife
  • miller
  • miner
  • minstrel
  • monk
  • mortician
  • mourner
  • nun
  • nurse
  • page
  • painter
  • pariah
  • pastry cook
  • peasant
  • perfumer
  • philosopher
  • physician
  • pigkeeper
  • pilgrim
  • plasterer
  • potter
  • priest/ess
  • professor
  • pursemaker
  • ratcatcher
  • roofer
  • ropemaker
  • rugmaker
  • sailor
  • scabbard maker
  • sculptor
  • saddler
  • scavenger
  • scholar
  • scrivener
  • servant
  • shaman
  • shepherd
  • ship's captain
  • shoemaker
  • silversmith
  • smith
  • soldier
  • spice merchant
  • squire
  • stablehand
  • storyteller
  • steward
  • surveyor
  • swordsman
  • sycophant
  • tailor
  • tanner
  • tavernkeeper
  • tax collector
  • teamster
  • thatcher
  • tinker
  • town crier
  • trapper
  • vendor
  • vermin catcher
  • vintner
  • warrior
  • water carrier
  • weaver
  • wine seller
  • witch
  • wizard
  • woodcarver
  • woodcutter
  • wood seller

Prohibited Titles

Some titles are not permitted in items, even if the character can display the title.

  • ambassador, royal advisor, seneschal, etc.: This includes any items with names or descriptions that imply royalty or royal appointments.
  • assassin, enforcer, hitman, etc.: This includes any items with crime-related names or descriptions.
  • commander, corporal, general, sergeant, etc.: This includes any items with names or descriptions referring to military ranks or insignia (other than "Captain" for ship owners).
  • galley slave, slave, slaver, etc.: This includes any items with slavery-related names or descriptions.
  • sniper, hunter: This includes any items with sniper- or hunter-related descriptions.
  • Torturer: This includes any items with torture-related names or descriptions.

Do not ask for any adornment or description with wording that signifies a special military rank, governmental position, royal connections or appointments. The exception to this rule is the title "captain" for nautical/boat themed items. Any ranks above captain (admiral, etc.) ARE, however, subject to this rule.

Avoid requesting an alteration that mentions a reference to royal ancestors or divine lineage. We want to try to keep historic lore within that which has been approved for the game. Likewise, we have a distinguished list of gods and goddesses and feel there are enough to go around.

Restricted Materials

If you wish to use the below materials in an alteration you must provide them. This doesn't cover depictions of the materials (e.g. embroidery of a vela'tohr flower). Some of this information was taken from the list on the DragonRealms Wedding Team website and Keishalae's list.

Some materials have special alteration rules or limitations. If known, such rules or limitations will be described on the relevant material page.

Below is a partial list of restricted materials. Please check the relevant material's wiki page for any special materials you may be considering.

Fabric

Creature Parts

For alteration designs that include skins/leathers/bones from huntable creatures, creature level determines whether players are required to provide these materials:[6]

Creature Level Creature Rarity Required for Alterations
< 100 Available 24/7 Common (does not need to be provided)
≥ 100 Available 24/7 Must be provided for alterations.
Any Not available 24/7
(Quests, Invasions, etc.)
Required for alterations, regardless of creature level.

Furs & Leather

Bones

Metals

Stone & Runestone Materials

Woods

Flowers & Plants

Flower-specific guidelines as per GM Winna, Nov 2018: Actual flowers need to be provided if actual flowers are intended to be in the altered item. For example, if a person wanted 'an elaborately woven wreath of dusky purple phofe flowers', they would need to provide the flowers. If they only wanted 'an elaborately woven wreath of sculpted silver phofe flowers', they would not need to provide the fresh flowers.

Gems

Materials From Huntable Creatures

In addition to the above specific restrictions, in general the following rules[7] apply to the use of materials taken from creatures which are huntable in-game:

  • If creature level is less than 100 and they are available in a 24/7 hunting area, the materials are considered common and not required to be provided for alterations.
  • If either creature level is greater than or equal to 100, or the creature is not available in a 24/7 hunting area (quests, invasions, etc.), the materials must be provided for alterations.

Special Techniques & Processes

Some items are created with special techniques and processes and may have special rules. Items utilizing these processes may not be alterable, or may require a special merchant.

This is not a definitive list. As always, the merchant has the final say.

Features

  • Feature: changing text features in your character's LOOK

Tattoos

General Rules

These are mainly common sense, and shouldn't be considered a comprehensive list. As with all alterations, the alterer has the final say. This list also designed to provide information for Assisted Wedding tattoos, which may be very different than those provided by the average tattoo merchant (the main difference being that wedding tattoos can cover multiple body parts in the description).

Updated Tattoo Rules for ALL Tattoo Merchants as of 2021:

  1. You must not have an existing tattoo. You will be freshly inked with the merchant.
  2. Tattoos cannot appear to move on their own.
  3. Tattoos must be "in good taste" and not sexually themed or inappropriate for a family game.
  4. Tattoos must not mention a person by name, but can describe a person.
  5. Tattoos are ink only. No gems, scarification, branding, glowing.
  6. Tattoos must begin with "She/he has a tattoo of" and end with "on his/her <area>."
  7. Tattoos can only be on one area of the character's body. No describing something on the hand and the foot, but shoulder to hand is ok (like a sleeve).
  8. Tattoos cannot have glitter or metallic ink or illusions of motion. They are flat art on your character's body.

Tattoo Rules for Prydaen

Prydaen tattoos should be kept minimal and on areas where the fur is likely to be thin or sparse (like limbs, wrists, cheeks). Something on a back or chest or the like would never actually show up unless they are bald in that area.

Valid Areas

  • face
  • neck
  • arm
  • chest (male) / shoulder (female)
  • back
  • leg
  • hand
  • ankle
  • wrist
  • tail
  • shoulder
  • forehead
  • cheekbone
  • thigh
  • left wrist
  • right wrist
  • chest
  • abdomen
  • forearm
  • chin
  • left cheekbone
  • right cheekbone
  • calf
  • left ankle
  • right ankle
  • left temple
  • right temple
  • left hip
  • right hip
  • lower back
  • left palm
  • right palm
  • right knuckles
  • left knuckles
  • upper lip
  • lower lip
  • lips
  • shins
  • knees
  • right shin
  • left shin
  • right knee
  • left knee
  • scalp (only if a bald race)

Titles

  • These rules apply only to pre- and post-titles. Affiliation titles ("of XYZ") are not available via alteration.
  • 2 words, maximum. (Adding connecting words is ok within reason.)
  • 20 characters, maximum (May have a very LITTLE wiggle room here.)
  • Title cannot currently be in the system.
  • If your request uses a title that is in the system, you must meet all requirements for that title. Please use the TITLE FIND command for your requested title. You must qualify for all parts of your request. If you want to use "Guardian Knight" then you must check both "guardian" and "knight" to be sure that you qualify for both. You must display anything that is bound by a requirement, so be prepared to put those titles on.
  • The GM working with you has the final say on the title.
  • Please do NOT pick up the custom title pins with only one title in mind. If your initial choice is turned down, there are no refunds on these pins. You should only get a custom title pin if you have numerous potential titles in mind.

Creatures

Spell Customizations

Miscellaneous Alterations

Proposed Tier System

A ranking of alteration difficulty has been distributed on the discord server. This was used to determine alteration cost during the Aesthene's Close 449 event.

Writing Tips

Show, Don't Tell

We're in a text-based world, and rely on words to convey the images since graphics are absent. With that in mind: "show, don't tell." Or, to coin a phrase from school: "active versus passive voice."

Let us note here that passive voice is NOT incorrect by any means, and there are many people that prefer passive voice to active voice. It's a bit of a personal fingernail-on-chalkboard for some, and some GMs and Assistants will try and talk you out of it, but it's NOT incorrect. However, the difference is that passive voice tends to "list" things, while active voice tends to "paint a picture". Active voice isn't an easy way to write for a lot of people, but if it's something you can get a handle on, you may find it more pleasant to read through. And, as a bonus, you may find that using active voice trims words out of the description, making it more concise.

The "Flow" of Your Alteration

Your inventory is normally in an arranged order, flowing from head to toe in a logical sequence.

Your alteration should probably do the same. There are many options when considering the flow of an item: back to front, front to back, top to bottom. Broad to detailed, or vice versa. It doesn't matter which direction you choose, but choose one and go with it. Consider the following:

Option 1: The cloak features a sequined red fox across the back, tail curled and brushing the hem. A ruby clasp framed in gold closes the garment, while red-tipped fox fur lines the hood. Tiny rubies stitched along the hem complement the clasp, and brush the sequined tail. The body of the cloak is lined with snowbeast fur.
Option 2: The cloak features a sequined red fox across the back, tail curled and brushing the hem. Red-tipped fox fur lines the hood, blending into the snowbeast fur that lines the body of the cloak. A ruby clasp framed in gold closes the garment, complementing the tiny rubies stitched along the hem.

Both options present the same features, but how does your eye flow in your imagination?

Option 1: Back of cloak on the outside, front of the cloak, inside top of the cloak, bottom outside of the cloak to the bottom of the back of the outside of the cloak, inside body of the cloak.
Option 2: Back of the cloak, inside of the cloak, front of the cloak, bottom of the cloak.

The eye of your imagination follows a more logical progression with Option 2, making you more inclined to have a full visual picture of the cloak when you are done reading.

Other Tips

  1. When you SHOW an item to someone else they see the TAP, followed immediately by the LOOK. The first sentence of your item's description shouldn't rehash what you just said in the TAP. Avoid repeating yourself, particularly right out of the gate.
  2. Examine your word choices and phrasing. Do they work well together, across the alteration? If you're trying to evoke a certain feeling: using themetic words, or just swapping out a couple here or there, can help tremendously. Grab a thesaurus!
  3. If you've written something and aren't pleased with it, examine the structural bits. Read the whole thing and see if it works together. Excellent flow is often what separates good alterations from great ones.
  • Think about the cadence. Are your sentences all the same length and shape? Varying the sentence structure, even just slightly, can give your design a big boost.
  • Similarly, do all of your sentences start the same way? Watch out for overuse of "a/the". There are other great ways to begin.

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