Alteration
Alterations are GM mediated custom changes to a facet of your character, usually an item. In most cases, these alterations are purely cosmetic, but sometimes additional factors can be added.
In addition, there is also a specific type called LTB Alterations or Premium alterations and Feature alteration that have their own special rules.
Process
Alterations can come from a variety of sources, but the two most common are merchant sessions and scroll alterations.
Merchant Sessions
Most common at festivals, alterers will show up either randomly or at prescheduled times. They will open a list, that when JOINed will place your name on said list. The list usually remains open for some time, to allow everyone to join, an occasionally it will remain open during the entire event. But usually, it will be closed after a decent amount of time, preventing any other joiners. At any point if you reconsider your decision to join the list, you may type LEAVE LIST to leave the alteration list. If the list has been closed, you will not be able to reJOIN it.
At this point, the alterer will usually either pick the first name (very uncommon) or a random name from the list (usual) to do work with. It should be noted, getting on the list does not guarantee work unless the alterer specifically states it. Some alterers will only work for five or ten people, others do multi-hour events working for fifty or more.
Like all alterations, all rare materials must be on hand and as well as payment required by the alterer. If your rare material 'fodder' is in many small pieces; compare the total volumes and make an educated guess on what your alteration will require. Put the like-type alteration materials in a simple pouch you won't want back. Keep any other materials separate to make the alterer's life easier.
Assistants
It has become more common in recent years for alterers to employ player assistants to do the initial examination of someone's idea, as these people tend to be experienced in the process. They'll help people with incomplete ideas enhance them, pick out any typos or rules violations, and just generally clean up the idea. While it is not required that the assistant's ideas be listened to, it is highly likely the alterer will not look favorably upon complete disregard of their rule corrections.
Role-playing Considerations
Role-playing considerations are always in play. This is the case with any live merchant anywhere, regardless of if it happens during a paid event or not. Live merchants are role-playing events.[1]
For example, if you're playing a Perverse-aligned character, it might not go well when you show up to a religious Rakash merchant.
Alteration Scrolls
Scroll alterations are often done either through the LTB system or as a reward for purchasing an event. These differ in that all contact with the alterer is done via an in-game item, the scroll, and depending on the complexity or requests, may take several days.
Not all alteration scrolls are equal. Depending on the scroll's source, the types of items you can have worked performed on will vary. More complex items require that the merchant processing your request have more clearances — not all GameMasters can work on all items. Some items cannot be altered via scroll, period.
Using Scrolls
- Hold the object you want altered in your left hand before you write to this scroll.
- To get rid of your alterer's scroll, you must DROP it. It will blow away after a little while. Once you drop a scroll, all information about your request will be erased, and you will need to get a new one from the merchant.
- Once you have written to the scroll, you are free to put both items away, and go on about your business. You'll be notified when the merchant responds in any way. However, you will need to have the scroll in your possession in order to respond to any messages or suggestions the merchant makes.
Merchants have the final word. Read any posted information about what types of things the merchant alters and what rules the merchant uses.
Commands
- WRITE CHANGE: Allows you to change the item you want to be altered. You must be holding the new item in your left hand when you used this option.
- WRITE NEW {text}: Overwrites any existing request, but if the scroll is already associated with an item, it will not change that association (use CHANGE, in that case). You can use this to start over at any time prior to ACCEPTing the alteration and price.
- WRITE REPLY {text}: Allows you to respond to a merchant's message.
- WRITE ACCEPT: (Signs the alteration contract and authorizes the merchant to charge you and create the alteration.)
- WRITE OFFER {amount} [province]: When a merchant gives you a price for the alteration, you can bargain a different price using this command. The optional province can be: ZOLUREN, THERENGIA, ILITHI or QI'RESHALIA
- You ACCEPT after the merchant has approved either an alteration, or a counteroffer on the price for the alteration.
Scroll Types
LTB Scrolls
Generally speaking, this type of alteration will consist of a holdable/wearable, non-magical item that isn't heavily scripted. Cambrinth items are also acceptable. These are always cosmetic changes only.
Event-Tier Scrolls
Scrolls obtained through events can (again, generally speaking) be used on more complex items than Long-Term Benefit (premium) scrolls. As with LTB scrolls, any changes would be strictly cosmetic (only be to the tap/look/read, not to the functionality or messaging).
Examples of items you might be able to alter with Event scrolls but not with LTB scrolls: magical foci, and weapons/armor with flare enchantments.[2]
A comprehensive list of guidelines for Corn Maze scrolls can be found here.
Errors & Buyer's Remorse
Alterations are final. Once a design is agreed upon that's it. Please ensure that you're happy with the final results before leaving the session. Try not to feel rushed, or that you're holding up the line. Everyone involved in the process wants you to walk away with a product you'll be happy with. Sometimes that can take a while.
- If you're attending a merchant session and cannot agree upon a design the "slot" can be refunded. You're not committed and can walk away. Just ask.
- Items can be re-altered. Where and how you do that depends on what the item is. If it's something that can only be done by a merchant you'll have to resubmit it to a merchant.
- If you have a typo (it happens) you can ASSIST about it.
- If you just want to change something, though, it's treated as a new alteration. Another slot, another scroll, etc.
String Limits
Type | Command To See | Length/Guidelines |
---|---|---|
Item SHORT | (base item) | 15/15/15, "article,adjective,noun" |
Item TAP | INV HELD | Cannot exceed 80 characters. No commas. (including the leading article a/an/some and spaces) |
Item LOOK | LOOK [ITEM] | Try to stay under 500 characters. 511 characters is the hard limit. (512+ gets truncated.) |
Item READ | READ [ITEM] | 50 characters and 10 words |
Post room strings | 80 characters and 10 words. No commas. | |
Atmospheric Messages | Ideally the length of a TAP (around 80). Some wiggle room. Keep it as short as possible. | |
Titles | 20 characters and 2 words. (Adding connecting words is ok within reason.) | |
Custom Maker's Marks | 150 characters. Automatically prefixed with with "the image of" and appended "with impressed into the material's surface" (not counted in character count limit). | |
Custom DEPART messages | No longer than 500 characters, including spacing and punctuation. | |
Custom login/logout messages | Maximum 150 characters for what you see when you log in or out. Maximum 90 characters for what shows up in the Arrivals window. |
Note: There must be two spaces between all sentences.
This tool can be helpful in keeping your alteration idea within character count limits: http://drservice.info/static/alterationbuddy.htm
Items
General Rules
- The merchant has the final say.
- Merchants generally do not add special mechanics or scripts to items.
- Merchants generally do not change where an item is worn or how much it can hold.
- The short description is purely mechanical, and is how you interact with the item. It is setup 15/15/15, "article,adjective,noun".[3]
- Players do not have to define this, as it's usually obvious and straightforward. If you have specific preferences, however, please state them to the merchant or their assistant.
- The tap (the name of the item that you see when you type INV HELD) cannot exceed 80 characters (including the leading article a/an/some and spaces)
- The tap cannot contain commas. (Commas serve as separators in inventory lists.)
- The look (what you see when you type LOOK [ITEM]) cannot exceed 512 characters, including spaces and punctuation. (There must be two spaces between sentences.)
- A read (what you see when you type READ [ITEM]) should be no more than 50 characters and 10 words. (Most writing should be in a separate read and not in the tap or look.)
- Words or phrases in any racial language will have to be verified and may not be possible at all times.
- Character names are generally not allowed.
- Phrases and writing should ideally be in the READ and not the LOOK. Be aware that the system automatically appends the phrase "There appears to be something written on it." when the READ is populated, so having written text in both locations (or referring to the READ text in the LOOK) can occasionally produce awkward results.
- If containers are being used as a source for material (and not the item altered), they must be empty.
- Items named after a race are usually not permitted. For instance a Kaldaran shield needs to be specifically described in such a way that it can only be Kaldaran.
Out of Bounds
- Items cannot dictate how people feel or react. (For example, your armor can't strike fear into the hearts of your enemies.)
- Items cannot imply that they have mechanics they do not have. For example, stalking leathers can be "designed to aid stealth," but they do not actually and cannot be said to aid the wearer in moving about.
- Obvious out-of-genre or out-of-character references/designs are not permitted.
- Nothing obscene, vulgar, or sexually explicit is permitted.
- Items in DragonRealms should generally not be more than PG-13. Players wearing "nothing special" are assumed to be wearing very boring underwear. How a player dresses their character is up to them, but items should not be written with an inherently racy undertone to them.
- Avoid: Garter belt, halter-top, panties, thigh-high fishnet stockings, bra, bikini, boxers, ANY "adult toys"
- Generally Okay: garter (wedding garter), halter-neck top, bustier, bandeau, chemise, corset, loincloth
- Avoid collars (outside priest collars used for that purpose). "Choker", "scarf", and "torque" are better alternatives.
Magic & Lighting
- The words "rune", "sigil", and "glyph" are reserved for the magic and enchanting systems and are not permitted. Using these on items inherently implies they are magical. Even actual magical items should also not have these terms unless they were originally designed to have runes, sigils, or glyphs on them.
- Other synonyms, such as "symbols", "markings", or "cursive script" are usually permitted. (Generally, the closest you can get is "symbols resembling celestial sigils" as celestial sigils generally have a defined look.)
- An item can be described as having light bouncing off it. This does not need any special modifiers such as "when the light hits it" or "in the light". It's generally assumed that if a player can see the item, there's enough light around for the item to also sparkle. However, a should not be described as 'brightly lit' all the time.
- Items cannot glow or otherwise emit their own light (unless one of its materials naturally glows). Shimmering and other similar words are acceptable. Even if a gem is described as "glowing", an item should not be made to "glow" by itself. Glowing is generally reserved for scripted or magical items (gaethzen for example).
- Good: "sparkling", "gleaming", "scintillating", "shining", "glistening", "shimmering", "brilliant", "vivid", etc
- Bad: "glowing", "pulsating", "burning", "incandescent", "luminescent"
- Grey area: "luminous", "fiery"
An Item's History
The history of the item cannot be described, as a stranger looking at it would have no way of knowing this information:
- It is okay to artificially "age" an item during an alteration. However, the description should be what you can see in front of you -- while it may be apparent that an item has been "torn and then repaired several times", it's impossible to know that it's because a player "got in a fight with an angry hoard of badgers and came out victorious". Write what you see, not what the player knows what happened.
- A good way to get around this is to make a small scene showing what happened.
- Bad: "The backpack has been torn several times by angry badgers over the long years, and repaired by the steady hand of Catrox."
- Better: "The backpack has been torn and repaired several times, apparent from the different threads used in each stitching. A small hoard of angry badgers is painted onto the front."
- As above, descriptions of the cause of damage to an item are not permitted. However, the damage itself is usually acceptable. (For example, you might describe a robe as "scorched" but can't say that the damage was caused by a lightning strike.)
- It is okay to use the word "worn" on an item as long as it's obvious it refers to age instead of it being physically worn. "Old" is also acceptable -- unclear if this is still true. The word "antique" should generally be avoided because it implies inflated value. Antiquated is not acceptable because it denotes age on items. The word "antiqued" is better as it could be referring to a process of apply fake aging.
- Descriptions of the origin, provenance, or chain of ownership of the item are not permitted.
- Bloodstains are okay, but need to be dried blood (which is a rusty brown, not crimson). Where the blood came from should be ambiguous -- IE you should not describe it as "Human" blood or "leucro blood" or "pig blood". Pretty much all blood looks the same.
How It's Worn
- Some descriptions should specify "when worn" or similar phrasing to prevent confusion or strangeness when an item is not being worn.
- Items need to be described in a way that it makes sense no matter if it's on a player, in a backpack, stuffed in a vault, or lying on the ground. The item descriptions also need to be gender-neutral, and not use 'his' or 'her' pronouns unless scripted to handle that.
- The easiest way to get around this rule is to use such as "cut to", "designed to", "made to". It's also acceptable to use "wearer" to some extent, which implies that if there isn't a wearer, the item isn't currently in that state.
- Avoid: "the silk train drapes to the floor behind her".
- Better: "the silk train is designed to drape to the floor behind the wearer".
- Also avoid describing the WEARER's body. For instance, "an evening dress cut to reveal the soft skin beneath" does not take into account Prydaens, S'Kra Mur, people with hardened or weathered skin, and so on.
Use of Written Language
Written language on items may appear in the TAP, LOOK, or READ of an item. In general, keep in mind that the size/nature of the item you are working with can and should influence the amount of written language it can contain. A 15-word phrase of 250+ characters on an earring or ring is jarringly unrealistic.
The following considerations can help guide your decisions while designing your items:
Written Language in the READ
The READ should be the default location for lengthy written text on an item. A player can describe the "flourishing embroidered phrase sweeping across the fabric" or the "spiraling words engraved into the metal" in their LOOK, but then just put the actual written text in the READ. This is particularly true if the phrase is one that would require more than 'at a glance' reading (e.g. more than 2 words). Written phrases in the READ should avoid having more than 10 words in them, should never exceed 15 words, and are surrounded by quotes with no additional text outside of the quotes.
Written Language in the TAP
Certain items that make logical sense to have a large written phrase that can be seen from a distance can have written text in the TAP. This includes things such as titles on books, phrases on badges, or slogans on t-shirt. In contrast, the TAP is not a place to casually add a permanent written "label" on any random sort of item. Written language on a TAP should generally be 1 or 2 words (an additional connecting word may be ok), and are surrounded by quotes. The overall TAP should still comply with standard character length requirements.
Written Language in the LOOK
The LOOK may be used for short, label-like descriptions that are not appropriate for the TAP given the nature of the item in question. These sort of written statements in the LOOK should only require 'at a glance' effort to read all at once (e.g. 1 or 2 words) and are surrounded by quotes. Something like a silver ring could reasonably have a LOOK of "The flawlessly polished metal is etched with the phrase "My Heart" on the inner band."
Style: Races, Locations & Guilds
Places, provinces, and cities are always capitalized. This includes in items.
Races are always capitalized. This includes in items. The proper spellings are as follows:
Singular Plural Race Item Language Human Humans the Human race a Human [item] Gamgweth Dwarf Dwarves the Dwarven race a Dwarven [item] Haakish Elf Elves the Elven race an Elven [item] Ilithic Halfling Halflings the Halfling race a Halfling [item] Olvio Gor'Tog 1 Gor'Togs the Gor'Tog race a Gor'Tog or Toggish [item] Toggish Elothean Elotheans the Elothean race an Elothean [item] Gerenshuge S'Kra Mur 2 S'Kra Mur the S'Kra Mur race a S'Kra [item] S'Kra (spoken) or Eth'ral'khh (written) Gnome Gnomes the Gnome race a Gnomish [item] Gorbesh Kaldar Kaldar the Kaldar race a Kaldaran [item] Gorbesh Prydaen Prydaens the Prydaen race a Prydaen item Prydaenese Rakash Rakash the Rakash race a Rakash item Rakash
- Gor'Tog can be informally shortened to "Tog".
- S'Kra Mur can be informally shortened to "S'Kra".
An example of singular, plural, race, and item:
- Singular: He is an Elf.
- Plural: There are four Elves over there.
- Race: The Elven people have many different clans.
- Item: This is an Elven longsword.
Profession names are capitalized when talking about the profession as a whole, but not when talking about an individual. The proper spelling is as follows:
Profession Individual Paladins' Guild a paladin Barbarians' Guild a barbarian Rangers' Guild a ranger Clerics' Guild a cleric Empaths' Guild an empath Warrior Mage Guild a warrior mage 1 Thieves' Guild a thief Moon Mage Guild a moon mage Bards' Guild a bard Traders' Guild a trader Necromancer Guild a necromancer 2
- "warrior mage" can be informally shortened to "war mage".
- "necromancer" can be shortened to "necro".
- Avoid using "cutesy" names like "pally", "warmie", "teef", "moonie", etc in items except within quotes, preferably within the READ or LOOK.
Material Changes
General Items
Generally speaking you can change the base materials of clothing, containers, and fluff items. Don't change the essence of what the item fundamentally is.
Weapons & Armor
If a specific material is specified in the tap you may not change the item to be constructed of something else entirely. Adding embellishments using secondary materials is fine.
- The item material not changing is mostly for weapons and armor. You can usually move it from the tap to the look, though.
- Example: if you have "a steel sword" you could make it...
- TAP: a long sword with icesteel inlay
- LOOK: The steel of the sword is sharpened to a fine point.
- Partially, this has to do with the fact that different materials create a different template. And, if it is forged and reclaimed, someone down the line could be really confused as to why their silversteel sword gave them a hunk of regular old steel.
Noun Changes
General Items
A dress can change into a gown – they are both the same thing, usually worn in the same place! A pack can be a rucksack – they're both the same thing, usually worn in the same place! Shoes can be boots, or slippers, or flats, or heels. These changes are ok! A ball can be a globe, a medallion can be a medal. A charm can be a trinket! But if we're changing it, it has to make sense for the item and match the worn place. (A dress could not become a skirt, because those items are worn in different slots.)
Some merchants are willing to change the noun to a racial noun when appropriate. For example, a "robe" might become a "gamantang" or an "odaj."
As a very general rule of thumb for noun changes for worn fluff, at a minimum, merchants are usually looking for all of the following conditions to be met:
- The two nouns are roughly synonymous (e.g., a dress might become a gown but not a tunic).
- The two nouns would be worn in the same slot.
- The desired noun is available in a 24/7 shop.
Bear in mind that merchants may have their own rules or professional standards, and some items might have mechanical reasons for restrictions on noun changes.
Note: An example of an item from years ago with an incorrect worn-place is not justification to make your item a thing it doesn't make sense to be!
The GM handling your alteration has the final say, and this post should in no way be construed as a guarantee that a noun change will be allowed, even if conditions 1-3 are met. If they say no, that means no.
Weapons & Armor
Weapons and armor have templates. Many systems touch them, and they should generally be left alone. When a katana is made it uses a katana template. A sword has a sword template.
Now, as a general rule the noun is not alterable. There is a slim chance that you may happen across a special merchant who is run by a GM that has the knowledge and ability to see what else a certain template touches, what other systems are effected by the templates, and make modifications so as to not break your thing in the certain circumstances that you touch another one of those systems with it.
The number of GameMasters approved to make these changes on the fly is very low and those with the necessary clearances generally do not have much time for performing alterations.
It’s not a never thing but it is super rare and if the merchant says no that means that they literally can’t.
Special Items with Specific Rules
Chippable Weapons
Typically, chippable weapons (or chipper weapons) require a special alterer, such as Vomna. These weapons must follow general alteration rules by default. (Make sure to review those above, including weapon specific rules.) Chipper weapon alterations can sometimes include cosmetically altering a weapon (TAP, LOOK, and/or READ) as well as changing it to a chipper weapon.
There are some limitations on what can and cannot be a chippable weapon.
- Must be a melee weapon.
- May be a weapon with an enchanted flare.
- May be an item that has two templates, with the understanding that THROWN attacks (LOB, HURL, THROW) will not trigger the chip mechanic. This applies to items such as the hhr'ata, throwing hammer, throwing club.
- May be an item that can be used at pole weapon range. This applies to staves and polearms.
Some types of weapons will not be compatible for chipper transformation. This is is largely due to the inability of any item to have two scripts. Some examples of incompatible weapons:
- Brawling weapons ie: elbow spikes, knee spikes, hand claws, knuckles, parry sticks, footwraps
- Exoskeletal weapons
- katavdar tailbands
- Paladin Holy weapons
- Ranged weapons ie: throwing daggers, crossbows, slings, bows, and their variants.
- Stackable thrown weapons ie: glaes throwing stars
- Swappable weapons ie: bastard swords and ristes
- T'Kashi mirror weapons
Chip Specific Rules
- Chip noun must be an existing noun in the game. ie: sliver, chip, incisor, rock, pebble, shard
- Chip noun must be pluralized by adding a single "s". ie: sliver/slivers
- Only the SHORT TAP may be altered. See String Limits.
- The chip weapon damage type may be chosen as puncture, slice, or impact. You may choose only one. The template points are not freely adjustable.
- The chip type must make sense for the existing construction of the weapon.
- The chip color must be an existing or allowed color for its material type.
- Chip material may not be a rare material.
Instruments
- Instrument material cannot be changed via scroll alterations.
- Only a live alterer can change the composition of an instrument (wood to metal for example) and only if it makes sense.
- A live alterer can change the appraisal of your instrument but not the difficulty of the instrument.
Maker's Marks
Incorporating Marks
Maker's marks on player-made equipment have some special rules:
- If a mark is present on a piece of equipment, it must be incorporated in the new design. There are no exceptions, even if the crafter is present to waive the requirement.
- Custom maker's marks must retain their full mark in its original form. A custom mark could theoretically be moved from into the READ, assuming such a change makes sense contextually.
- On standard marks, you do NOT have to keep the exact wording (e.g. "You see the initials 'C. M.' impressed into the surface of the metal"). You can change it to something similar as long as the mark and initials remains on the item.
- If a mark is not present on an item, and you want to add it to the item, the merchant must be able to independently verify who made it. There appears to be a short window of time (a few days) in which it is possible to tell who made it even without a mark.[4]
Custom Mark Creation
- You must provide your own basic stamp. Work cannot be performed on someone else's stamp.
- Design can be no more than 150 characters in length, and will be automatically prefixed with with "the image of" and appended "with impressed into the material's surface" (not counted in character count limit).
- This is an actual, physical marking. The design cannot be animated or magical, nor can it shimmer or shine. There is no guarantee of complete uniqueness — some elements may be shared with other stamps.
Prayer Mat
- Prayer mat alterations (even if just cosmetic) are limited to live merchants.
- Alterations may or may not include a deity change in addition to a SHORT, TAP, LOOK, and READ change.
Shadow Servants
- The noun must remain "Servant" and the TAP must keep "Shadow Servant" in it. Both words must remain capitalized.
- Shadow Servants must have arms, a mouth, and a stomach. Their anatomy beyond this is flexible.
- Shadow Servants are made of shadows only. No additional colors, clothing, or items may be added.
- In terms of size, Servants are roughly humanoid sized and must remain this way.
- Shadow Servants are docile. Their look cannot imply hostility or intimidation in any form.
- Adjectives already in use by the system are permitted so long as additional wording does not introduce hostility or intimidation.
- System adjectives (Incomplete) - brooding, cantankerous, disagreeable, gloomy, glowering, grumpy, hunchbacked, indolent, lethargic, looming, lugubrious, misshapen, morose, obstreperous, ornery, ponderous, sluggish, sulking, sullen, surly.
- Adjectives already in use by the system are permitted so long as additional wording does not introduce hostility or intimidation.
- Adjectives that have been made available on tokens such as shadowy hollow token are not necessarily permitted, because these are items available for a limited time.
Magical/Scripted Items
Many items with special magical effects or scripts can only be worked on by certain merchants. Please ask in advance and come prepared with a Plan B in case your merchant cannot work on the item.
Additionally, some items (such as the dull serpent earcuff) have special alteration rules or cannot be altered at all. If known, such rules or limitations will be described on the relevant item page.
- Note
- generally, an item cannot have two scripts. Some examples...
- Feature-modifying jewelry cannot also function as a magical item hider.
- Holy weapons cannot have soulstones added.
- The hold-x-items containers cannot have ice-veined leather added.
- Shimmering (color-changing) clothing cannot have additional verbs added.
- Examples of items with magical effects or scripts that may require a special merchant
- ashcloaks
- atmospheric items (ie: drifters, floaters, or floaties)
- cambrinth
- chakrel
- chippable weapons (See above.)
- feature-modifying items (See below.)
- flying brooms or flying carpets
- magical item hiders (You may now combine as many hiding mechanics as you want, provided the merchant works on such items.)
- orlogs
- passive stat regenerating items (ie:dull serpent earcuffs)
- pilgrim's badges (Only the tap can be altered, not the look.)
- prayer mats (See Prayer Mat section.)
- ritual foci and Targeted Magic foci.
- soulstones (Special verbs may be lost by the addition of a soulstone.)
- spell-casting items (ie: wands, rattles, items that cast a specific Spell)
- vanity pets (ie: rats, kittens, pigs, monkeys.)
- whisper charms (Requires live (in-person) merchant.)
Feature-modifying Items
- Q - Can they be altered?
- A - Yes, they can be altered, but only the TAP usually shows up in features, and sometimes (depending on the setup) only the SHORT. Alterers likely will not change that setting in a session.
- Q - Can they be altered via LTB scroll?
- A - Yes, but probably not "location" change.
- Q - Are there any special rules (character limits, etc)?
- A - No limits other than the normal. Because these can be pushed into the features and pulled out, the TAP should never mention anything about the features, it should only be the item.
- Q - Is their script stackable with any other scripts (like hiders, etc.)?
- A - Not stackable, but should work with beard jewelry script as well, so you can wear both.
Titles/Professions in Item Designs
The guidelines for incorporating titles in items are basically as follows:
- If it's not on this list of pre-approved titles, the character getting the alteration done will need to be able to wear the title.
- The title that ends up on the item will be lowercase and the same as the one worn (no mixing titles or using partial titles).
- The desired title needs to make sense as an item descriptor. (Some of our titles just don't work on items.)
- Ideally, the design should make it clear how that item is suited for the profession being used as a descriptor. For example, a "legionary's" pack might have adjustable straps ensuring optimal weight distribution, reducing fatigue during long marches.
Explicitly Permitted Titles
- actor
- advocate
- alchemist
- animal handler
- apothecary
- architect
- archer
- aristocrat
- armorer
- artisan
- artist
- astrologer
- baker
- banker
- barber
- barkeep
- barmaid
- beekeeper
- beer seller
- beggar
- blacksmith
- boatman
- bookbinder
- bookseller
- brewer
- buckle maker
- builder
- butcher
- caravan leader
- carpenter
- cartographer
- captain (nautical themed)
- chandler
- charioteer
- chatelaine
- chef
- chieftain
- chirurgeon (surgeon)
- clergyman/clergywoman
- clerk
- clock maker
- clothworker
- cook
- cooper
- copyist
- counselor
- courtier
- cowherd
- crossbowman
- cutler
- dairymaid
- diplomat
- distiller
- diver
- diviner
- domestic servant
- explorer
- farmer
- fighter
- first mate
- fisherman
- fishmonger
- footman
- furrier
- gardener
- gladiator
- glovemaker
- groom (animal groomer)
- harness maker
- hatmaker
- hay merchant
- hearthwitch
- herald
- herbalist
- herder
- hermit
- highwayman
- illuminator
- innkeeper
- interpreter
- inventor
- jailer
- jester
- jeweler
- jongleur
- judge
- knight
- laborer
- lady
- lady in waiting
- leatherworker
- locksmith
- longbowman
- maidservant
- majordomo
- man at arms
- mason
- mercer
- merchant
- messenger
- midwife
- miller
- miner
- minstrel
- monk
- mortician
- mourner
- nun
- nurse
- page
- painter
- pariah
- pastry cook
- peasant
- perfumer
- philosopher
- physician
- pigkeeper
- pilgrim
- plasterer
- potter
- priest/ess
- professor
- pursemaker
- ratcatcher
- roofer
- ropemaker
- rugmaker
- sailor
- scabbard maker
- sculptor
- saddler
- scavenger
- scholar
- scrivener
- servant
- shaman
- shepherd
- ship's captain
- shoemaker
- silversmith
- smith
- soldier
- spice merchant
- squire
- stablehand
- storyteller
- steward
- surveyor
- swordsman
- sycophant
- tailor
- tanner
- tavernkeeper
- tax collector
- teamster
- thatcher
- tinker
- town crier
- trapper
- vendor
- vermin catcher
- vintner
- warrior
- water carrier
- weaver
- wine seller
- witch
- wizard
- woodcarver
- woodcutter
- wood seller
Prohibited Titles
Some titles are not permitted in items, even if the character can display the title.
- ambassador, royal advisor, seneschal, etc.: This includes any items with names or descriptions that imply royalty or royal appointments.
- assassin, enforcer, hitman, etc.: This includes any items with crime-related names or descriptions.
- commander, corporal, general, sergeant, etc.: This includes any items with names or descriptions referring to military ranks or insignia (other than "Captain" for ship owners).
- galley slave, slave, slaver, etc.: This includes any items with slavery-related names or descriptions.
- sniper, hunter: This includes any items with sniper- or hunter-related descriptions.
- Torturer: This includes any items with torture-related names or descriptions.
Do not ask for any adornment or description with wording that signifies a special military rank, governmental position, royal connections or appointments. The exception to this rule is the title "captain" for nautical/boat themed items. Any ranks above captain (admiral, etc.) ARE, however, subject to this rule.
Avoid requesting an alteration that mentions a reference to royal ancestors or divine lineage. We want to try to keep historic lore within that which has been approved for the game. Likewise, we have a distinguished list of gods and goddesses and feel there are enough to go around.
Restricted Materials
If you wish to use the below materials in an alteration you must provide them. This doesn't cover depictions of the materials (e.g. embroidery of a vela'tohr flower). Some of this information was taken from the list on the DragonRealms Wedding Team website and Keishalae's list.
Some materials have special alteration rules or limitations. If known, such rules or limitations will be described on the relevant material page.
Below is a partial list of restricted materials. Please check the relevant material's wiki page for any special materials you may be considering.
Fabric
- Albarian lace
- Armure
- Arzumodine
- Avia
- Barkcloth
- Bast
- Berrybomb bast (Please see page for additional rules.)
- Bitterweave
- Bloodlace
- Bluefire velvet
- Bourde
- Camlet
- Chaosknit
- Cire
- Deathfiber
- Dergatine (fabric)
- Dragonar
- Dragonfire brocade
- Dreamweave
- Duchess satin
- Electroweave (May need to weave the static fibers into the fabric, vs bring the raw fibers.)
- Elven silk
- Elven snowlace
- Elven wool
- Eolienne
- Fae-spun silk (Fae-spun silk, faeweave, fae-woven silk, and faesilk are considered different materials for the purposes of alterations.)
- Fae-woven silk (Fae-spun silk, faeweave, fae-woven silk, and faesilk are considered different materials for the purposes of alterations.)
- Faesilk (Fae-spun silk, faeweave, fae-woven silk, and faesilk are considered different materials for the purposes of alterations.)
- Faeweave (Fae-spun silk, faeweave, fae-woven silk, and faesilk are considered different materials for the purposes of alterations.)
- Farandine
- Featherlette
- Firestorm chiffon
- Firestorm damask
- Firestorm fiber
- Firestorm samite
- Firestorm taffeta
- Firestorm velvet
- Fractalline
- Gemfire velvet
- Goldweave
- Gravecloth
- Heartstring lace
- Ialalhe (Special rules with color changes.)
- Icesilk (LOOK restrictions; cannot be used as thread.)
- Imperial weave
- Jaalmin
- Jadeleaf cloth (Generally cannot be dyed.)
- Jaspe
- Khaddar
- Khiynit (Please see page for additional rules.)
- Kirmiko (fabric)
- Kor'athi
- Lava samite
- Lotusweave
- Madun
- Marblesilk (Please see page for additional rules.)
- Marquisette
- Misiumosette
- Mistsilk (May be required.)
- Moonspun silk
- Musparan silk
- Nightreaver silk (Spinnerets may be required.)
- Oceanmist satin
- Petalette
- Plumette damask
- Plumette fiber (Can't be an embroidery thread.)
- Plumette samite
- Plumette taffeta
- Plumette velvet
- Rosecloth
- Ruazin wool
- Rumweave (Only for SimuCon items.)
- Scalene
- Seasilk
- Shadesatin
- Shadowsilk (Generally not allowed/alterable.)
- Shireli lace
- Silkcress
- Silveress
- Silverweave
- Snowflake tulle
- Songsilk
- Spun glitter
- Spun rainbow
- Starfire velvet
- Starlight velvet
- Steelsilk
- Stoneskin tweed
- Stormfire velvet
- Stormsilk (Not suitable as thread for embroidery.)
- Storyplait (Must use common name, not the Prydaenese naming.)
- Sunfire brocatelle (Please see page for additional rules.)
- Sunfire faille (Please see page for additional rules.)
- Sunfire fiber (Please see page for additional rules.)
- Sunfire georgette (Please see page for additional rules.)
- Sunfire lampas (Please see page for additional rules.)
- Sunfire sateen (Please see page for additional rules.)
- Sunkissed chiffon
- Taisidon silkcress
- Thickspun wool
- Thornweave
- Titanese
- Treasureweave
- Turbaurs
- Uzil
- Velakan linen
- Velakan wool
- Watersilk (Not suitable as thread for embroidery.)
- Westan wool
- Whirlpool crepe
- Whisperlayne
- Wildlace (Unsuitable for armor. Existing pieces must retain original color and pattern.)
- Windstorm gossamer
- Winterweave
- Witchweft
- Zenganne
- Zerarin lace
- Zerarin wool
- Zibeline
- Zillinen (Only for SimuCon items.)
Creature Parts
For alteration designs that include skins/leathers/bones from huntable creatures, creature level determines whether players are required to provide these materials:[5]
Creature Level | Creature Rarity | Required for Alterations |
---|---|---|
< 100 | Available 24/7 | Common (does not need to be provided) |
≥ 100 | Available 24/7 | Must be provided for alterations. |
Any | Not available 24/7 (Quests, Invasions, etc.) |
Required for alterations, regardless of creature level. |
Furs & Leather
- Bark-hide leather
- Cloud-white leather
- Cloudlake leather
- Corrugated-hide leather
- Crusty bark-hide leather
- Dark dragon-scale hide
- Demonsbane leather (Please see page for additional rules.)
- Demonscale (Should not be dyed.)
- Desumos-pelt leather
- Diamond-hide
- Droluger-hide leather
- Enaada
- Faelight leather
- Firecat-skin leather (Please see page for additional rules.)
- Fur seal pelt
- Heartname leather
- Helei leather
- Hiro bear pelt
- Ice-veined leather (Scripted material.)
- Inkhorne-skin leather
- Jaguar pelt
- Jaguar-pelt leather
- Kau leather
- Knarn fur
- Korograth hide
- Mammoth-hide leather
- Morgawr leather
- Panther pelt
- Puffy-white leather
- Punka
- Raven pelt
- Sandskin
- Sanguinai
- Seal-pelt leather
- Serpentine-hide leather
- Shadowleaf
- Sianedra (Color always retains caramel undertones.)
- Smoi leather
- Smokewhorl
- Sunken leather
- Walrus hide
- White fox pelt leather
- Whitleather
- Wyvern-hide leather
Bones
Metals
- Abyssium
- Adamantia steel
- Agonite
- Aldamdin
- Animite (Please see page for additional rules.)
- Asharsh'dai
- Asini
- Atheldalm
- Audrualm
- Black gold (LOOK restriction; can not be applied to a different-noun item.)
- Blighted gold
- Blue gold
- Burning goldfyre
- Cambrinth (Not all GMs can alter functional cambrinth. Cannot typically add functional cambrinth to an item.)
- Coralite
- Damite
- Darkstone (metal)
- Dawnfire steel
- Diacan
- Dwarven iron
- Electrified goldfyre
- Electrum
- Elven gold
- Ephemeral goldfyre
- Everdusk damite
- Flooded goldfyre
- Forgeheart iron
- Fracturing goldfyre
- Gais
- Glaes
- Goldenglow glaes
- Goldfyre
- Green gold
- Hafaltu (Cannot be intricately carved.)
- Haledroth
- Haralun
- Hiromin (Has requirements for glow.)
- Icesteel
- Ilmenite (Cannot be intricately carved.)
- Indium
- Indurium
- Iridium
- Ithridu
- Ka'hurst
- Kadepa
- Keismin
- Kelpzyte
- Kertig
- Kiralan (Can be smelted and worked like a metal)
- Kuwinite
- Loimic
- Loveglass
- Lumium
- Meteoric iron
- Mistglass
- Moen takibena
- Moonsilver (Must stay its original color/type.)
- Muracite
- Negnetha
- Niello
- Niniam
- Oceanic orichalcum
- Orichalcum
- Purple gold
- Quelium
- Selatila
- Silversteel
- Star-kissed kertig
- Starshine
- Sungold
- Telothian
- Tomiek
- Truegold (can be described as "glowing truegold")
- Tursa
- Tyrium
- Uthamar
- Vardite
- Velakan starsteel
- Windsteel
- Wuthering goldfyre
Stone & Runestone Materials
- Aevanstone
- Anjisis
- Asketine (Cannot be intricately carved.)
- Avaes (Cannot be intricately carved.)
- Axinite (Cannot be intricately carved.)
- Azurite (Cannot be intricately carved.)
- Belzune
- Blackwater jet
- Calavarite (Cannot be intricately carved.)
- Celestite (Cannot be intricately carved.)
- Dhhresh
- Diorite
- Dreamstone (Scripted dreamstone items can't be altered.)
- Elbaite (Cannot be intricately carved.)
- Erythrite (Cannot be intricately carved.)
- Felstone
- Fulginode
- Gloamstone
- Glowstone
- Iheaneu'a (Cannot be intricately carved.)
- Imnera (Cannot be intricately carved.)
- Ixaemite
- Lemicule (Cannot be intricately carved.)
- Maelstone
- Maiden's marble
- Nightstone
- Rhodonite (Cannot be intricately carved.)
- Scheelite (Cannot be intricately carved.)
- Selenite (Cannot be intricately carved.)
- Senci
- Sharkstone
- Sraeth (Cannot be intricately carved.)
- Starstone
- Surlaenis gold marble
- Xenomite
- Xibaryl (Cannot be intricately carved.)
- Zengalmi (Cannot be intricately carved.)
Woods
- Adderwood
- Aesetani applewood
- Aformosia
- Albarco
- Aldamalm (wood)
- Alerce
- Avodire
- Ayabere
- Azurelle
- Bocote
- Bogbirch
- Brinewood
- Cloudbark
- Cobwood
- Copperwood (Not needed for alterations.)
- Crabwood
- Darkspine
- Diamondwood
- Dragonwood
- Durian
- E'erdream
- Felwood
- Finivire
- Fyearikil agani
- Ghostspine
- Glitvire
- Gloomwood
- Goldbark
- Goldwood
- Greenheart
- Grimwood
- Haizeebo
- Hexwood
- Icethorn
- Ilithic applewood
- Ilomba
- Iroko
- Ironrot
- Kapok
- Khor'vela
- Lirisan
- Macawood
- Pozumshi
- Ramin
- Ribbon-stripe
- Riverlimb
- Rockwood
- Shadowbark
- Siksrajan applewood
- Silverwood
- Smokewood
- Spiritwood (If fodder is not pure white, the alteration may not be pure white.)
- Stormwood
- Tamarak
- Tamboti
- Zingana (wood)
Flowers & Plants
Flower-specific guidelines as per GM Winna, Nov 2018: Actual flowers need to be provided if actual flowers are intended to be in the altered item. For example, if a person wanted 'an elaborately woven wreath of dusky purple phofe flowers', they would need to provide the flowers. If they only wanted 'an elaborately woven wreath of sculpted silver phofe flowers', they would not need to provide the fresh flowers.
- Albreda's Heart rose
- Aldam lorma flower
- Blazing Star flower
- Cassava root
- Crimson Massacre carnation
- Death's Shadow lily
- Desert Scorpion blossom
- Dusk rose
- Etlingera
- Fawn lily
- Flaming Arrow wolfsbane
- Ghost orchid
- Glythtide's Garden rose (Insanity rose, Betrothal rose, etc.)
- Gnomish kocho
- Golden Eu's Promise flower
- Golden Treasure rose
- Harawep's Web rose
- Healing Heart orchid
- Heaven's Bells
- Jambu
- King protea flower
- Lion's Mane iris
- Lisianthus
- Midwinter's Sickle
- Moonlight gardenia
- Moonstained wildflower
- Phofe flower
- Queen of the night lily (or Queen-of-the-night lily)
- Rainbow rose
- Romantic Ballad peony
- Samatak (nothing samatak for weddings, including flowers)
- Scarlet Panther lily
- Sun's Glory
- Tamsine's Blessing tuberose
- Tamsine's Cauldron rose
- Tidal lily
- Vanderpea
- Vela'tohr flower
- Velvet lily
Gems
- Absinthe emerald
- Abyssal quartz
- Aeschelich
- Alavern
- Aldamalm (gem)
- Alshabi stone
- Ambergris
- Ametrine
- Amlothite
- Anloral (Can't be added to an item.)
- Aoustone
- Asarenjan (if item tap mentions glowing, asarenjan must be explicitly referenced as the source.)
- Atulave
- Aurora opal
- Aurora tourmaline
- Avene
- Bearclaw emerald
- Black assassin's diamond
- Black diamond (Only needs to be provided if desired in large quantities.)
- Blackberry miajho
- Bleeding heart jade
- Blood ruby
- Bloodmist garnet
- Blue hawkseye
- Bumblebee jasper
- Celeste
- Cerith shell
- Chakrel (LOOK restriction; only jewelry-type items allowed)
- Champagne diamond
- Chaos chalcedony
- Cherry opal
- Chocolate opal
- Cinacs
- Cloud ruby
- Cloudstone
- Conquerer's ruby
- Cosmic zircon
- Crimson emerald
- Crimson sapphire
- Crystalline dragon tear
- Dalaeji black sapphire
- Dalterein diamond
- Damaryn pearl
- Dawgolite
- Dawnbreak diamond
- Demantoid garnet
- Demon gaze agate
- Dendritic opal
- Dewdrop diopside
- Dragon Fire opal
- Dragon's Blood ruby
- Dragon's Eye ruby
- Dragon's Heart ruby
- Dragon's blood crystal
- Dragon's scale sapphire
- Dragonfire amber
- Dragonvein agate
- Drake's heart amber
- Drogor's Wrath sapphire
- Durgauldite
- Dusk spinel
- Duskbloom sapphire
- Dwalgim
- Ebon Jackal's Heart pearl
- Eclipsed iolite
- Elamiri pearl
- Elamiri sapphire
- Elanthite
- Eldring
- Eluned's tear sapphire
- Enelne's eye
- Er'qutrite
- Erythraean
- Estrildite
- Eu's promise crystal
- Eventide moonstone
- Fathomstone
- Fire Maiden topaz
- Fire agate
- Fire whirl ruby
- Firesilk opal
- Firulfian crystal
- Flame opal
- Flame spinel
- Forest fire jasper
- Forest's Heart garnet (Always faceted, never cabochon.)
- Fortune's Star diamond
- Frost opal
- Frostflare opal
- Gemfire ruby
- Geobloom (Please see page for additional rules.)
- Glacier emerald
- Glitterstar (Only for SimuCon items.)
- Gloomglass
- Godsmarked turquoise
- Grapefruit ruby
- Grazhite
- Hav'roth's ambrosia
- Haze sapphire
- Heartstone
- Hekemhhg lazuli
- Heliotrope
- Honeycomb opal
- Honeydew diamond
- Howlite
- Huntress diamond
- Iahja
- Ice sapphire
- Iceblink peridot
- Idon's sapphire
- Ilithi emerald
- Imperial coral
- Imperial quartz
- Imperial ruby
- Imperial sapphire
- Imperial topaz
- Inferno's heart
- Inkdrop agate
- Irinai
- Ismenite
- Jelly opal
- Juicy loot (gem)
- Jungle turquoise
- Katamba jasper
- Katamba spinel
- Katamba's Spire
- Katambite
- Kazene
- Kiwi jasper
- Kuldaez crystal
- Lagoon's mist garnet
- Lava sphalerite
- Lava topaz
- Lemon quartz
- Lightning amethyst
- Lion's Heart topaz (Always faceted, never cabochon.)
- Lotus flower sapphire
- Mango fluorite
- Merewaldite
- Merlot ruby
- Mermaid's Tear sapphire
- Mermaid's chalcedony
- Midnight diamond
- Midnight onyx
- Midnight ruby
- Mistfall diamond
- Molten-core diamond
- Moon coral (Please see page for additional rules.)
- Moon pearl
- Moonspun ruby
- Morleenite
- Mountain agate
- Musparan gold sapphire
- Mystic topaz (As wedding item will count as verbed)
- Nature's Canopy emerald
- Negerat
- Night diamond
- Night sky citrine
- Nightfire opal
- Nimbus garnet (As wedding item will count as verbed)
- Ocean jasper
- Ocean's Deep emerald
- Ocean's Heart diamond
- Orchid alexandrite (As wedding item will count as verbed)
- Passionfruit beryl
- Peacock jasper
- Penhetite
- Persimmon peridot
- Phantom sapphire (As wedding item will count as verbed)
- Pineapple topaz
- Pink pearl
- Pitch pearl
- Plum garnet
- Plumed agate
- Rainbow hematite
- Rainbow sapphire
- Raspberry alexandrite
- Red diamond
- Red emerald
- Reshalian tourmaline
- Riftstone
- Rikar crystal
- Rimestone
- Riverhaven jet
- Rivertear
- Royal Zoluren topaz
- Saendalan emerald
- Saendalen emerald
- Saffron topaz
- Sana'ati heart
- Sand golem eye
- Sandstrike crystal
- Scarlet emerald
- Scorpion diamond
- Scoundrel's diamond
- Sea diamond
- Sea-green sapphire
- Seahorse sapphire
- Seastar tourmaline
- Serpent's Heart ruby
- Serpent's head sapphire
- Shadow emerald
- Shadowstar (Only for SimuCon items.)
- Shrike's Eye sapphire
- Siato star emerald
- Sirenstone
- Sky opal
- Smoke ruby
- Smokestone (Please see page for additional rules.)
- Smoky topaz
- Soulstone
- Spectrolite
- Spiderweb jasper
- Spiderweb turquoise
- Spiritgem
- Spring emerald
- Sraxaec's blood onyx
- Star sapphire
- Starfire topaz
- Starlight ruby
- Stormfire topaz
- Stormheart topaz
- Summer's Heart sapphire (Always faceted, never cabochon.)
- Sun coral
- Sunderstone (gem)
- Sunset opal
- Sunstar jasper
- Svelae
- Swirling charoite
- Syrin’s heart
- Szeldite
- Tablature turquoise
- Taffelberry sapphire
- Taisidon emerald
- Taisidon sunset garnet
- Taisidonian pearl
- Tarina
- Tasialm
- Teiro's Hate ruby
- Tempest sapphire
- Temptress beryl
- Thealstone
- Tidal bloodstone
- Tiger lily carnelian
- Twilight sapphire
- Ulhari prism
- Unicorn spinel
- Vela'tohr tourmaline (As wedding item will count as verbed.)
- Velakan pearl (Must stay its original color, as color determines rarity.)
- Vengeance ruby
- Verdant heart
- Verenite
- Violet's heart amethyst (Always faceted, never cabochon.)
- Viper's eye sapphire
- Viperscale alexandrite
- Voilyne
- Volcano's heart citrine (Always faceted, never cabochon.)
- Watermelon tourmaline
- Whiskey quartz
- White diamond
- Wild Horse jasper
- Winter emerald
- Wolfsoul amber
- Wraithheart
- Xibar topaz
- Xibarite
- Yavasite
- Yellow diamond
- Yellow heliodor
- Yoakenite
- Zenith spinel (If part of a wedding item, the usage counts as a verbed item.)
- Zephyr heart
- Zoetia
- Zoluren white sapphire
- Zuzaret
Materials From Huntable Creatures
In addition to the above specific restrictions, in general the following rules[6] apply to the use of materials taken from creatures which are huntable in-game:
- If creature level is less than 100 and they are available in a 24/7 hunting area, the materials are considered common and not required to be provided for alterations.
- If either creature level is greater than or equal to 100, or the creature is not available in a 24/7 hunting area (quests, invasions, etc.), the materials must be provided for alterations.
Special Techniques & Processes
Some items are created with special techniques and processes and may have special rules. Items utilizing these processes may not be alterable, or may require a special merchant.
This is not a definitive list. As always, the merchant has the final say.
Features
Tattoos
Template:TattooAlterationRules
Titles
- These rules apply only to pre- and post-titles. Affiliation titles ("of XYZ") are not available via alteration.
- 2 words, maximum. (Adding connecting words is ok within reason.)
- 20 characters, maximum (May have a very LITTLE wiggle room here.)
- Title cannot currently be in the system.
- If your request uses a title that is in the system, you must meet all requirements for that title. Please use the TITLE FIND command for your requested title. You must qualify for all parts of your request. If you want to use "Guardian Knight" then you must check both "guardian" and "knight" to be sure that you qualify for both. You must display anything that is bound by a requirement, so be prepared to put those titles on.
- The GM working with you has the final say on the title.
- Please do NOT pick up the custom title pins with only one title in mind. If your initial choice is turned down, there are no refunds on these pins. You should only get a custom title pin if you have numerous potential titles in mind.
Creatures
- Biomechanical Tarantula Rules
- Familiar Alteration Rules - Limited to one familiar alteration per character.
- Living Spider Cloak Alteration Guidelines
- Vanity Pet Alteration Rules
Spell Customizations
- Circle of Sympathy Alteration Guidelines
- Guardian Spirit Alteration Guidelines[7]
- Moongate Alteration Guidelines
- Shadow Servant Alteration Guidelines
Miscellaneous Alterations
- Embiggening: enlarges containers to hold more items
- Rebecho: adds ties to items
Writing Tips
Show, Don't Tell
We're in a text-based world, and rely on words to convey the images since graphics are absent. With that in mind: "show, don't tell." Or, to coin a phrase from school: "active versus passive voice."
Let us note here that passive voice is NOT incorrect by any means, and there are many people that prefer passive voice to active voice. It's a bit of a personal fingernail-on-chalkboard for some, and some GMs and Assistants will try and talk you out of it, but it's NOT incorrect. However, the difference is that passive voice tends to "list" things, while active voice tends to "paint a picture". Active voice isn't an easy way to write for a lot of people, but if it's something you can get a handle on, you may find it more pleasant to read through. And, as a bonus, you may find that using active voice trims words out of the description, making it more concise.
The "Flow" of Your Alteration
Your inventory is normally in an arranged order, flowing from head to toe in a logical sequence.
Your alteration should probably do the same. There are many options when considering the flow of an item: back to front, front to back, top to bottom. Broad to detailed, or vice versa. It doesn't matter which direction you choose, but choose one and go with it. Consider the following:
- Option 1: The cloak features a sequined red fox across the back, tail curled and brushing the hem. A ruby clasp framed in gold closes the garment, while red-tipped fox fur lines the hood. Tiny rubies stitched along the hem complement the clasp, and brush the sequined tail. The body of the cloak is lined with snowbeast fur.
- Option 2: The cloak features a sequined red fox across the back, tail curled and brushing the hem. Red-tipped fox fur lines the hood, blending into the snowbeast fur that lines the body of the cloak. A ruby clasp framed in gold closes the garment, complementing the tiny rubies stitched along the hem.
Both options present the same features, but how does your eye flow in your imagination?
- Option 1: Back of cloak on the outside, front of the cloak, inside top of the cloak, bottom outside of the cloak to the bottom of the back of the outside of the cloak, inside body of the cloak.
- Option 2: Back of the cloak, inside of the cloak, front of the cloak, bottom of the cloak.
The eye of your imagination follows a more logical progression with Option 2, making you more inclined to have a full visual picture of the cloak when you are done reading.
Other Tips
- When you SHOW an item to someone else they see the TAP, followed immediately by the LOOK. The first sentence of your item's description shouldn't rehash what you just said in the TAP. Avoid repeating yourself, particularly right out of the gate.
- Examine your word choices and phrasing. Do they work well together, across the alteration? If you're trying to evoke a certain feeling: using themetic words, or just swapping out a couple here or there, can help tremendously. Grab a thesaurus!
- If you've written something and aren't pleased with it, examine the structural bits. Read the whole thing and see if it works together. Excellent flow is often what separates good alterations from great ones.
- Think about the cadence. Are your sentences all the same length and shape? Varying the sentence structure, even just slightly, can give your design a big boost.
- Similarly, do all of your sentences start the same way? Watch out for overuse of "a/the". There are other great ways to begin.
References
- ↑ Post:Social Outrage - 12/03/2017 - 13:03
- ↑ Post:Corn Maze Scroll Alteration Guidelines - 12/24/2020 - 04:56
- ↑ For some insight on how this works mechanically, particularly with adjectives, see this post.
- ↑ Personal alteration experience
- ↑ GM Cordulia, via this Discord post
- ↑ Notes on alterations using materials from huntable creatures, via Discord
- ↑ Also see: this older post, which has some background/lore information.
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